Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a grammatically correct, concise direct answer with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb tense (past) and avoid unclear words. Use linking words if you add details (for example, “and” or “so”).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was a child, and I used to ride it to visit my friends every afternoon. It was small but sturdy, so I felt very confident riding it around my neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear, complete opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid unclear or incorrect words; choose vocabulary relevant to popularity (e.g., “common,” “popular,” “useful,” “convenient”). Use a linking word (for example, “because” or “because of”) to connect your opinion and reasons.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or school in cities where traffic is heavy.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was shy I really like.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child that I really liked.

The student mixed present tense 'have' with past time expression 'when I was' causing tense inconsistency. Also 'shy' is incorrect context; likely intended 'child.' Use past tense 'had' and past form 'liked' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events in the past and choose the correct noun ('child').

× Yes, I have a bike when I was shy I really like.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really liked it.

The original sentence lacks clear structure and punctuation, and omits the object pronoun for 'like.' Combine two ideas with a conjunction and include 'it' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: separate clauses with a comma and conjunction or use two sentences; include appropriate pronouns.

× Yes, I think spike and blood in my. Umm, convenient to use.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very common and convenient to use in my country.

The phrase 'spike and blood in my' is unintelligible and not grammatical. The student likely meant 'popular' or 'common' and needs the noun 'bikes' and location 'in my country.' Also add an adverb 'very' if emphasis is intended and correct word order. Suggestion: use clear vocabulary ('common' or 'popular') and complete the location phrase.

× Yes, I think spike and blood in my. Umm, convenient to use.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular and convenient to use in my country.

Incorrect words 'spike and blood' were used instead of adjectives describing bikes. Use appropriate adjectives 'popular' and 'convenient' to describe frequency and usability. Ensure word order: subject + verb + complement + location.