Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add one short specific detail. For example, correct tense and article: "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child." Then add a brief supporting detail with a linking word: "It was a small red bicycle that I rode to school every day."

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that I rode to school every day.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then support it with specific, coherent reasons using linking words. Use simpler, accurate vocabulary and avoid confusing phrases. For example: "Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical. Many people use them for commuting and small businesses, and there is also a growing community of mountain bikers."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run small deliveries, and there is also an active group of people who enjoy mountain biking on weekends.

× 'Yes, I had a bi.'

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike.'

'bi' is a spelling mistake that results in a non-word; the sentence otherwise has a verb (had) but the intended noun must be spelled correctly. Correct the spelling to "bike" to make the sentence meaningful.'

× 'I had a bike when I had when I was child.'

✓ 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

The sentence contains a repeated phrase ('when I had when') and is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Remove the extra words and add the article to form the correct temporal clause: 'I had a bike when I was a child.' Suggestions: read aloud to spot repetition and ensure articles are included with singular countable nouns.'

× 'The people using the daily wages on the bike like riding the mountains and using the bikes and works and manufacturing our bike in my country are very high basis.'

✓ 'Many people who earn daily wages use bikes to travel, enjoy riding in the mountains, work with bikes, and manufacture bicycles in my country; bike usage and production are very common.'

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions ('using the daily wages on the bike'), incorrect word order, missing relative pronouns, and unclear noun phrases. Rephrase to use correct prepositions and clauses: 'people who earn daily wages use bikes' and 'enjoy riding in the mountains'. Also replace 'works and manufacturing our bike' with 'work with bikes and manufacture bicycles' and express the conclusion clearly. Suggestions: break long ideas into clauses, use relative clauses ('who earn'), and choose appropriate prepositions ('use bikes to travel', 'riding in the mountains').'