Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và không rõ ràng; bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm 1–2 câu hỗ trợ (mô tả ngắn hoặc ví dụ) để làm rõ. Hãy tránh dùng cụm từ không liên quan như “Good job!” và giữ độ dài tối đa 5 câu.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that I learned to ride when I was six. It was my favorite toy and I used it every day to visit my friends and go to the park.

提案: Câu trả lời lộn xộn, nhiều tiếng lấp đầy và ngữ pháp sai; cần một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và liên kết ý bằng từ nối. Cố gắng tránh tiếng “uh” và sửa ngữ pháp (thì, chủ-động từ). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: thời kỳ, lý do, thay đổi hiện tại) để minh họa quan điểm.

例: Yes, I think bicycles used to be very popular in my country, especially a few decades ago. Back then, many people relied on bikes to commute to work and school because cars were expensive. However, with economic growth and more cars on the road, fewer people use bicycles for daily travel now.

× Uh, yes, mine is more, uh, popular in my country in the past, uh, when the life is not, uh, an envelopment, people you know, to use buy to go to work, go to school.

✓ Yes. Bicycles were more popular in my country in the past, when life was less developed and people used them to go to work and to school.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure and grammar issues: chaotic word order, incorrect verb tenses, and wrong word choices. Corrections made: use past tense 'were' to match 'in the past'; replace 'mine is more' with the general subject 'bicycles' for clarity and subject-verb agreement; change 'when the life is not an envelopment' to 'when life was less developed' to convey the intended meaning; use 'used them' as a correct past tense verb phrase and include parallel infinitives 'to go to work and to school'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into a clear subject and predicate, keep tense consistent (past for past situations), and use common collocations like 'less developed' and 'used to'.