Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I did), correct verb forms and pronouns, and avoid redundancy. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences, add a specific detail (where you rode or what you enjoyed) and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. A bike was an essential part of my childhood, and I rode it almost every day to visit friends and play in the park. I especially enjoyed racing down the hill near my house because it felt freeing and exciting.

提案: Work on subject-verb agreement, clarity and specificity. Start with a direct answer (Yes, they are) then give 1–2 concrete reasons with linking words (for example, because…). Avoid vague phrases like “every single ceremony” and replace with specific examples (commuting, markets, short errands).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use them to commute to work and school because they are cheap and convenient, and you often see cyclists in city markets and residential neighborhoods.

× There pretty much an essential part of my daily routine and I was a child.

✓ They were pretty much an essential part of my daily routine when I was a child.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and has incorrect tense/time wording. 'There' is used incorrectly (not matching 'there be' structure) and 'I was a child' should be connected with 'when' to indicate time. Replacing 'There' with 'They' (referring to bikes) fixes the subject; use 'were' to match plural subject in past tense and add 'when' for time clarity.

× I ride a bike every single day and it was so fun.

✓ I rode a bike every single day and it was so fun.

The sentence mixes present tense 'ride' with past context 'was a child' and 'was so fun.' Tenses must be consistent. Change 'ride' to past simple 'rode' to match the past timeframe.

× Definitely, it's really popular for my country and everyone ride a bike every single day.

✓ Definitely, bikes are really popular in my country and everyone rides a bike every single day.

'It's really popular for my country' is awkward and uses a singular subject 'it' incorrectly; 'bikes' is the subject. Also 'ride' must be 'rides' to agree with singular subject 'everyone.' Use 'in my country' for correct preposition.

× You can ride, go to work and school and every single. Ceremony.

✓ You can ride them to work and school and even to ceremonies.

The original is fragmented and contains incorrect punctuation and word order. 'Ride' needs an object ('them' referring to bikes). 'Every single. Ceremony.' is fragmented; replace with 'even to ceremonies' to express examples smoothly and grammatically.