Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific detail to enrich the answer. Use one or two linking words if you expand. Also correct minor grammar: use past tense consistently and say “my bike” rather than “the bicycle.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my friends around our neighborhood every weekend, and we would race to the park, which was about ten minutes away.

提案: Give a clear, direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid filler words and incorrect pronouns. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ to connect ideas and be specific about how people use bikes (commuting, markets, short trips).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and to go to the market. For example, in my city many workers and students cycle to work or school every day since bikes are cheap and easy to park.

× Yes, I had the bicycle when I was a child and I I like to ride it with my friends in the colony.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child, and I liked to ride it with my friends in the colony.

This sentence has two issues from the list: Article errors (ID 22) and Past tense issue (ID 5). The noun 'bicycle' should take the indefinite article 'a' because it is mentioned for the first time and is not specific, so 'the bicycle' is incorrect. Also the response refers to a past habit when the speaker was a child, so the verb 'like' should be in the past tense 'liked' to match 'had' and the time frame 'when I was a child'. Additionally there is a repeated 'I' which is a typing error; remove the duplicate. Suggestion: use 'a bicycle' and past tense verbs for past time expressions.

× He has bikes are very popular in my country as it's a daily household thing that is used in my country for for pursuing a daily purposes.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because they are used daily for everyday purposes.

This sentence contains several errors from the provided list: Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Sentence structure errors (ID 26), plus Article errors/redundancy. The pronoun 'He' at the start is incorrect and unnecessary for answering the question about bikes; begin the sentence with the subject 'Bikes'. The clause 'has bikes are' is ungrammatical and should be simply 'Bikes are'. 'It's a daily household thing' is awkward and incorrect for plural 'bikes'; use 'they are used daily'. The phrase 'for for pursuing a daily purposes' has duplication and incorrect word choice; replace with 'for everyday purposes'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent plural references. Suggestion: start with 'Bikes are very popular...' and use 'they are used daily for everyday purposes.'