Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct response and clear supporting details. To improve, make the answer slightly more concise (max 5 sentences), add a linking phrase to connect ideas, and include one specific detail (e.g., what kind of bike or a memorable incident) to enrich content. Also vary sentence openings to avoid repetition of 'I'.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a red mountain bike as a reward for winning first place in third grade, and I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends. Because it was new and bright, I felt extremely proud and would show it off at school and the park, which made me more confident.

提案: Clear opinion and relevant supporting reasons. To improve, combine short sentences using linking words (for example, 'especially' or 'because') and give a specific example or statistic to strengthen the answer. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'electric bikes' instead of 'E bikes') and watch minor phrasing errors ('specially' → 'especially').

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. Electric bikes, sport bikes and motorbikes are common because they are affordable and convenient for short-distance commuting, and in my city many students use electric bikes to get to college quickly.

× E bikes, sports bikes and motorbikes are specially common among young people because they are affordable and convenient for short distance travel.

✓ E-bikes, sports bikes, and motorbikes are especially common among young people because they are affordable and convenient for short-distance travel.

The sentence contains two issues that match the provided list: an incorrect use of an adverb/adjective form and incorrect use of preposition/compounding. 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, ID 13). Also, 'short distance' should be hyphenated as the compound modifier 'short-distance' before the noun 'travel' (this falls under incorrect use of prepositions/compounding but is best treated as an adjective formation issue). Additionally, 'E bikes' is more standard as 'E-bikes' with a hyphen and commas are needed in the list for clarity. Suggestion: use 'especially' for emphasis and hyphenate compound modifiers like 'short-distance'.