Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Скажите это более плавно и естественно, исправив грамматику и убрав лишние слова. Начните с короткого прямого ответа, добавьте конкретную деталь и объяснение с помощью связующего слова. Например, избегайте «I in that time» и используйте «at that time». Также объедините предложения, чтобы звучать связно.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was red and had two wheels, but at that time I couldn't ride very well, so I hardly used it.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более грамотно и логично: начните с прямого мнения, затем приведите причины с подходящими связками (for example, because, however). Укажите конкретные детали и избегайте разговорных обрывков («our people prefer use vehicles» можно заменить на «people tend to prefer cars or taxis»).

例: Not really. People in my country generally prefer cars or taxis because they are more convenient, especially for longer distances. However, some people rent bikes for fun or short rides with friends.

× Actually it was red with two wheels I remember.

✓ Actually it was red and had two wheels, I remember.

The sentence uses correct singular/plural nouns but lacks a proper verb to show possession of 'two wheels'. Use 'had' to indicate the bike possessed two wheels. Also add a conjunction or punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× But I in that time I couldn't ride a bike so I barely used it.

✓ But at that time I couldn't ride a bike, so I rarely used it.

Original has incorrect word order ('I in that time') and awkward adverb choice ('barely' vs 'rarely'). 'At that time' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Rarely' is more natural to describe infrequent use. Add a comma before 'so' to connect clauses properly.

× Not that much because our people prefer use vehicles or taxi or they have their own car, but just to enjoy.

✓ Not that much because people here prefer using vehicles or taxis, or they have their own cars and use bikes just for enjoyment.

Problems: 'our people' is unnatural; 'prefer use' needs a gerund after 'prefer' ('prefer using'); 'taxi' should be plural if general ('taxis'); 'they have their own car' should match plural 'they' with 'cars'; phrase order improved for clarity.

× If you're bored you can go take a bike and cycle with your friends.

✓ If you're bored you can go and take a bike and cycle with your friends.

After 'go' when followed by another verb, include 'and' to connect actions: 'go and take' is common in this context. Alternatively, 'go for a bike ride' could be used. Using the gerund 'cycling' would also be acceptable: 'go and cycle with your friends.'