Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answered directly and provided vivid personal details, which is good. To improve: (1) Correct minor grammar and collocation errors (e.g., say "learned to cycle" not "learning cycle"). (2) Vary sentence openings and use a linking word to make the sequence clear (e.g., "When I was four, I learned to cycle, and since then..."). (3) Keep answers concise — avoid slightly awkward phrases like "the habit of cycling is very close"; instead say "cycling became an important part of my daily life."

例: When I was four, I learned to cycle, and I fell in love with it on the same day. After that, I used my bike to go to school, tuition classes and the playground, so cycling became an important part of my daily life.

提案: Good clear answer with a general statement and supporting detail. To improve: (1) Use smoother linking words (e.g., "especially in rural areas, where"). (2) Avoid redundancy and awkward words — use "elderly people" instead of "elderlies." (3) Add a specific reason or brief example to strengthen the response (e.g., affordability, narrow roads).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially in rural areas where they are an affordable and practical way to travel. As a result, people of all ages — children, adults and elderly people — often use bikes to commute to work, school and the market.

× I vividly remember learning cycle at the age of four and the same day I fell in love with cycling.

✓ I vividly remember learning to ride a bicycle at the age of four, and on the same day I fell in love with cycling.

The phrase 'learning cycle' is incorrect; after 'learning' a verb or verb phrase is required (Grammar Problem Type 8). Use 'learning to ride' + object 'a bicycle'. Also add 'on' before 'the same day' for correct prepositional use and clarity. Use a comma and conjunction to join the two clauses properly.

× I used to take my bike to my school, tuitions, play area, everywhere.

✓ I used to take my bike to school, to tuition classes, to the play area, and everywhere else.

Articles and collocations are incorrect (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'My school' is acceptable but 'to school' is the common collocation for attending. 'Tuitions' is nonstandard; use 'tuition classes' or 'tutoring'. Add 'the' before 'play area' and include 'and everywhere else' for natural phrasing. Also parallel structure benefits from repeating 'to' for each destination.

× The habit of cycling is very close.

✓ Cycling has always been a close habit of mine.

The original is unidiomatic and unclear (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'Very close' needs an object (close to whom?). Rephrase to show possession or personal closeness: 'a close habit of mine' or 'it is very close to my heart' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes, quite popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country.

Sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb (Grammar Problem Type 26). Add the subject 'bikes' and verb 'are' to make a complete sentence.

× People use it all the time, especially in rural areas.

✓ People use them all the time, especially in rural areas.

Pronoun agreement and article issue (Grammar Problem Type 22 and 12). 'Bikes' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Ensure pronoun number matches the noun it refers to.

× That is the primary mode of transport, not only for kids, even for adults and elderlies.

✓ They are the primary mode of transport, not only for children but also for adults and the elderly.

Pronoun agreement and word choice errors (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'That' should refer to singular; since 'bikes' is plural use 'They'. Use 'children' instead of 'kids' for formality and replace 'elderlies' with the correct noun phrase 'the elderly'. Also use 'not only... but also' for correct conjunction structure.