Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), avoid repetition, correct tense and grammar (use past simple: “I had”), and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g. “For example” or “also”) to enrich the answer. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and often rode it with my brothers to the park. For example, after school we usually cycled together and I sometimes rode to my tuition classes. Those rides were a regular way for us to spend time together.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear, specific reasons and avoid fillers (“uh”, repeated words). Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, plural/singular forms) and linking words (e.g. “However,” “For example,” “Also”) to structure your answer. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many students ride simple bicycles to school, while adults often use motorbikes for commuting to work. Also, bikes are affordable and convenient for short trips, which makes them a common choice.

× If we talk about bike, yes, I do have bicycle in my childhood.

✓ If we talk about bikes, yes, I had a bicycle in my childhood.

The sentence refers to a past time (childhood) so present tense 'do have' is incorrect; use past tense 'had'. Also 'bike' should be plural or 'a bicycle'—here 'bicycle' needs an article. Suggestion: use 'I had a bicycle' for correct past reference and include the article.

× If we talk about bike, yes, I do have bicycle in my childhood.

✓ If we talk about bikes, yes, I had a bicycle in my childhood.

Missing article before 'bicycle'. In English singular countable nouns require an article ('a bicycle'). Also 'bike' in the opener should be plural or preceded by an article; 'talk about bikes' sounds natural.

× I usually usually play with my brothers on that.

✓ I usually played with my brothers on it.

The time frame is childhood (past), so use past tense 'played' instead of present 'play'. Also 'on that' is unnatural; use 'on it' to refer back to the bicycle. Remove duplicate 'usually'.

× I usually usually play with my brothers on that.

✓ I usually played with my brothers on it.

The word 'usually' is repeated; duplicate words are redundant. Also the sentence needs past tense and correct pronoun 'it' for the bicycle.

× We usually do cycling from our home to the park, so we spend our time together by doing that.

✓ We usually cycled from our home to the park, so we spent time together doing that.

When referring to habitual past actions, use past simple 'cycled' rather than 'do cycling'. 'Do cycling' is unnatural. Also 'spend our time together by doing that' is wordy; use 'spent time together doing that'.

× We usually do cycling from our home to the park, so we spend our time together by doing that.

✓ We usually cycled from our home to the park, so we spent time together doing that.

The events occurred in the past (childhood), so verbs should be in past tense: 'cycled' and 'spent' rather than present 'do cycling' and 'spend'.

× Also, whenever we came from school, I always like to go on bicycle for my tuition.

✓ Also, whenever we came home from school, I always liked to go by bicycle to my tuition classes.

Mixes past and present: 'came' is past, so 'like' should be past 'liked'. 'Go on bicycle' is incorrect collocation; use 'go by bicycle'. Specify 'tuition classes' for clarity. Keep tense consistent.

× Also, whenever we came from school, I always like to go on bicycle for my tuition.

✓ Also, whenever we came home from school, I always liked to go by bicycle to my tuition classes.

Use 'came home from school' rather than 'came from school' for natural phrasing; use 'by bicycle' not 'on bicycle'; use 'to' before 'tuition classes'.

× According to me, it depend on every person.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on each person.

'According to me' is non-idiomatic; use 'In my opinion'. Verb 'depend' needs third person singular 'depends' to agree with 'it'. 'Every person' is acceptable but 'each person' is more natural here.

× According to me, it depend on every person.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on each person.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'it' requires 'depends' (third person singular). Also adjust phrase to idiomatic 'In my opinion'.

× Mostly people like to travel by by bike.

✓ Most people like to travel by bike.

'Mostly people' is not idiomatic; use 'Most people'. Remove duplicated word 'by'. 'By bike' is correct prepositional phrase.

× Like uh, we do have motor bicycles and we do have simple bicycles.

✓ We have motorbikes and regular bicycles.

'Like uh' is filled pause and should be omitted in formal responses. 'Do have' is unnecessary; simple present 'have' is fine for general facts. Use 'motorbikes' (or 'motorcycles') and 'regular bicycles' for clarity.

× Students usually go with the bicycle for their schools and the elder ones go for their jobs on the motor vehicles.

✓ Students usually go to school by bicycle, and older people go to their jobs by motorbike.

'Go with the bicycle' is incorrect preposition; use 'go to school by bicycle'. 'Their schools' is redundant; 'to school' is natural. 'The elder ones' is awkward; use 'older people'. 'On the motor vehicles' should be 'by motorbike' or 'by motor vehicle'.

× Students usually go with the bicycle for their schools and the elder ones go for their jobs on the motor vehicles.

✓ Students usually go to school by bicycle, and older people go to their jobs by motorbike.

'Elder' used incorrectly; 'elder' modifies family relations, use 'older people' for general reference. Adjust adverb placement and adjective choice for natural phrasing.

× So yeah, we do have.

✓ So yes, we do.

'We do have' without an object is incomplete; in context 'we do' is sufficient. 'Yeah' is informal; use 'yes' in formal speech.