Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Parece que repetiste la pregunta en lugar de responder. Debes contestar directamente con una oración temática y, si es necesario, añadir uno o dos detalles específicos usando conectores. Por ejemplo, di si sí o no, luego explica cuándo o qué tipo de bici, y por qué te gustaba o no. Mantén máximo 5 oraciones y evita repetir la pregunta.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought for my seventh birthday, and I used it every day to ride to the park. Because the neighborhood was quiet, I felt safe practicing new tricks, so I became quite confident on two wheels.

提案: Tu respuesta apunta a una idea buena pero tiene errores de vocabulario y fluidez, y quedó incompleta. Usa una frase inicial clara, emplea vocabulario correcto (por ejemplo, 'bike lanes' o 'ciclovías' en inglés: 'bike lanes'/'cycle paths'), y añade una razón concreta con un conector (because, because of, since). Evita terminar la frase de forma abrupta y limita a 3–4 oraciones coherentes.

例: Yes, bikes are becoming very popular, especially in Mexico City. The city has added many bike lanes and a public bike-sharing system, which makes riding more convenient. Because of this improved infrastructure, more people choose cycling for short trips and commuting.

× Yes, especially in Mexico City where there are more cyclobias and I think it's because the infrastructure is more planned than in other countries and.

✓ Yes, especially in Mexico City where there are more cyclists, and I think it's because the infrastructure is more planned than in other places.

The main issue is the incorrect word 'cyclobias' (not an English word) and an incomplete sentence ending with 'and.' Replace 'cyclobias' with 'cyclists' (correct noun for people who ride bikes) and finish the sentence by replacing 'other countries and' with 'other places' to avoid the unfinished conjunction. Also 'other places' is clearer than 'other countries' in this comparative context. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and ensure sentences are complete by avoiding dangling conjunctions; proofread the end of the sentence to confirm it expresses a full idea.