Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct small grammar issues (use singular/plural and articles) and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to connect the reason.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My mother thought bicycles were more suitable for boys, so she wouldn’t allow us to ride. As a result, I mostly walked or took the bus to visit friends.

提案: Give a clearer topic sentence and provide a specific example or comparison. Use a linking word to organize ideas and correct verb tense/word choice (e.g., 'kids often hang out' not 'used to'). Mention where and why bikes are popular to add concrete detail.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns and during summer. For example, many children and teenagers often cycle to parks and markets because it’s cheap and convenient, whereas in big cities people tend to use public transport more.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mom believed that bike is for boys, so she didn't let us use bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mom believed that bikes are for boys, so she didn't let us use bikes.

The original sentence uses 'bike is' which is incorrect when speaking generally; the noun should be plural with 'are' for general statements about a category. Change 'bike is for boys' to 'bikes are for boys' and 'use bike' to 'use bikes' for natural plural reference. Suggestion: use plural nouns with plural verbs when making generalizations about a category.

× Yes, I believe that bikes are popular in our country, especially during summer in provinces where kids used to hang out by going to different places around the city.

✓ Yes, I believe that bikes are popular in our country, especially during the summer in provinces where kids hang out and go to different places around the city.

Two issues: 'during summer' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a season in general: 'during the summer'. Also 'used to hang out by going' implies a past habitual action; the context asks about general popularity, so present simple 'hang out and go' is more appropriate. 'Used to' would indicate they no longer do it. Suggestion: use 'the summer' for seasons and present simple 'hang out and go' for current habitual actions.