Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by making the opening more natural and adding one specific detail to enrich the response. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences) and use a linking word to connect ideas smoothly. Also vary your vocabulary slightly (e.g., use “bike” and “ride” alternatives).

例: Yes, I did — my parents bought me a bike when I was eight, and I rode it around our neighborhood every weekend with my friends. Because it was a small, red mountain bike, I felt confident tackling the gentle hills nearby, which made those weekends really memorable.

提案: The idea is good, but the answer needs clearer phrasing, more natural word choice, and a specific example or brief reason. Use linking words (for example, therefore) and avoid awkward constructions. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences and replace vague phrases with precise ones.

例: Yes, I think so. Many people cycle for exercise and commuting because it’s inexpensive and convenient; for example, students and office workers often ride bikes to avoid traffic and save on transport costs.

× it is used as a leisure way of exercising and also it is used to save money as a form of another way in transportation system

✓ it is used as a leisurely way of exercising, and it is also used to save money as an alternative form of transportation

The original phrase contains awkward and incorrect word forms: 'leisure way of exercising' should use the adjective 'leisurely' (present participle/adjective form) to modify 'way'. 'as a form of another way in transportation system' is ungrammatical and wordy; 'an alternative form of transportation' is the correct and concise noun phrase. Also move 'also' to natural position ('it is also used'). Improve parallel structure and word choice. Suggestion: Use 'leisurely' to describe 'way', and replace the long phrase with 'an alternative form of transportation'. Ensure parallel structure for the two uses ('it is used... and it is also used...').

× I had a bicycle when I was a child.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child.

This sentence is correct; 'a bicycle' correctly uses the indefinite article to describe a single, non-specific bicycle. No change needed.

× My parents bought it for me when I was 8 and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every weekend with my friends.

✓ My parents bought it for me when I was eight, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every weekend with my friends.

The sentence is grammatically correct in tense and aspect: 'bought' is simple past for a completed action, and 'used to ride' correctly expresses a past habitual action. Minor improvement: write the number '8' as the word 'eight' in formal writing and add a comma before the conjunction joining two independent clauses.