Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly add one supporting detail if needed. Correct article and tense errors: say “No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child.” If you want to expand, add a short reason or memory using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”). Keep total length under 4–5 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child. Because my family lived in a small apartment, there wasn’t much space to store one. As a result, I usually borrowed my neighbor’s bike on weekends.

提案: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Fix grammar and vocabulary: say “Most people own a bike” and avoid filler words like “uh.” Clarify vague phrases (e.g., what is PADA?) and give concrete reasons or comparisons (commuting, cost, culture). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Most people own a bike because it is an affordable and convenient way to commute in crowded cities. For example, teenagers often prefer bikes for short trips and social rides, while adults use them for daily travel to work or markets.

× No, I did not own bike when I was child.

✓ No, I did not own a bike when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before singular countable noun 'bike' is an article error (ID 22) and 'a child' needs the article; also word 'own' is fine. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular countable nouns and include 'a' before 'child' as 'a child'.

× I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Most of the people own a personal vehicle which is bike.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Most people own a personal vehicle, which is a bike.

'Most of the people' is awkward; use 'Most people'. 'which is bike' is missing the article 'a' before 'bike' and needs a comma. This is an article error (ID 22) and sentence structure issue (ID 26). Suggestion: remove 'of the' for general statements and put 'a' before singular nouns: 'a bike'.

× Additionally, uh, teenagers more.

✓ Additionally, teenagers are more likely to do so.

Fragment 'teenagers more' lacks a verb and is incomplete (sentence structure error, ID 26; sentence without a verb, ID 23). Suggestion: add a verb phrase such as 'are more likely to do so' or 'use bikes more' to complete the sentence.

× They like bike because they want to ride in PADA.

✓ They like bikes because they want to ride in the park.

'They like bike' needs plural or article ('bikes' or 'a bike') — article/plural error (ID 1 and 22). 'ride in PADA' appears to be incorrect preposition or wrong noun; likely intended 'ride in the park' so missing definite article 'the' and wrong noun. This is incorrect use of prepositions/articles (ID 11 and 22). Suggestion: use 'bikes' and 'ride in the park' or 'ride bikes'.