Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the tense and make the response more natural and slightly expanded. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then briefly explain why or give a short detail. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small apartment and my parents thought it was safer for me to play in the yard, so they never bought one. As a result, I usually walked or took public transport to visit friends.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct, use appropriate linking words, and add a specific example or reason to support your opinion. Keep sentences concise and avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat similar phrases).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many children and teenagers own them and often ride with friends. For example, on weekends you can see groups of teenagers cycling in parks and along neighborhood streets, which makes bicycles a common sight.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I am a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes past tense 'didn't have' with present tense 'am'. Use past tense consistently for a past time reference. Replace 'am' with the past form 'was' to match 'didn't have'. Suggestion: When talking about your childhood, use past tense verbs for both clauses, e.g., 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular because many children and teenagers own bike and often ride with friends and park or around the neighborhoods, so I see them everywhere.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular because many children and teenagers own bikes and often ride with friends and park around the neighborhoods, so I see them everywhere.

The noun 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to agree with the plural subject 'many children and teenagers' (singular/plural agreement). Also 'park or around the neighborhoods' is incorrect; 'park around the neighborhoods' correctly places 'park' as the verb and 'around the neighborhoods' as the prepositional phrase. Suggestion: Ensure nouns match number with their subjects and keep prepositional phrases together, e.g., 'many children and teenagers own bikes and often ride with friends and park around the neighborhoods.'