Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and length. Begin with a clear topic sentence using correct past tense (e.g., "Yes, I did"). Then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "and"). Avoid repetition and keep it under five sentences. For example, mention who gave the bike, how often you used it, or a short memory to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bicycle when I was seven, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day. Because I practiced a lot, I became quite confident cycling on busy roads.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence structure, correct word order, and more precise reasons. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, bikes are very popular"). Use linking words such as "because" or "as" and provide specific supporting details (availability, cost, fuel efficiency, culture). Avoid vague phrases and repetition, and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "inexpensive" instead of "cheapest price").

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. In addition, many people prefer motorcycles and scooters for commuting since fuel is expensive and traffic is heavy, so two-wheelers are a practical choice.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child child because.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past simple 'had' to match the past context; include the article 'a' before 'child' and remove the duplicated word 'child'. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for past possessions and 'a child' for correct article usage.

× Yes, very bikes are popular in our country because very easily available at very cheapest price.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because they are easily available at very low prices.

The original has incorrect word order and tense. 'Very bikes' is wrong order; 'are very popular' is correct. Add subject 'they' and verb 'are' to form 'they are easily available.' Use 'low prices' instead of 'cheapest price' because 'cheapest' is a superlative needing comparison; 'very low prices' conveys general affordability. Also change 'very easily' to 'easily' and place 'very' before 'popular' if needed.

× Our citizens like bike, like sport.

✓ Our citizens like bikes and enjoy sports.

'Like bike' is missing plural and article; use plural 'bikes' or 'a bike'. Also 'like sport' should be plural 'sports' or 'playing sports.' Combine ideas with 'and' rather than a comma. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy' for activities and plural nouns for general statements (e.g., 'bikes' and 'sports').