Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, concise topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical mistakes. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') correctly and limit your response to around 2–4 sentences. Also correct common errors: say 'safer' (not 'more safer'), 'it can be dangerous' (instead of 'it can hurt easily'), and 'on my own' should be clarified (alone or walking).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I often watched other children ride, but I never learned because I was afraid of falling and getting injured, so I preferred walking or using public transport.

提案: Start with a clear overall statement, then give specific regional contrasts using clear linking words ('however', 'in contrast', 'in the north'). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'not popular', 'pickup trucks' or 'motorbikes') and avoid run-on sentences. Be specific about which areas prefer cars and why (e.g., roads, income, culture). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are popular in some parts of my country. For example, in the northern and central regions many people use bicycles for short trips, but in the western and southern regions people prefer cars or pickup trucks because roads are longer and incomes are higher.

× No, I never owned a bike, but I saw other children riding the bike and even as an adult I'm so afraid of bikes because I know that it can hurt easily and other things. I think it's more safer to be on my own than not to own or ride a bike.

✓ No, I never owned a bike, but I saw other children riding bikes, and even as an adult I'm very afraid of bikes because I know they can be dangerous. I think it's safer to be on my own than to own or ride a bike.

Multiple issues: use of plural forms and pronouns, word choice, and redundancy. 'riding the bike' should be 'riding bikes' to match general reference (plural). 'it can hurt easily' is incorrect because 'bike' is not the subject; use plural pronoun 'they' and 'be dangerous' is a natural collocation. 'more safer' is incorrect comparative (double comparative); use 'safer' alone. 'than not to own or ride a bike' is awkward; use parallel infinitives 'to own or ride a bike'. Suggestions: use plural for general statements, match pronouns to antecedents, avoid double comparatives, and keep parallel structure in comparisons.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country, but in certain parts of the country, not all in the northern region and in the southern region but in the western and eastern South of the country bites are no popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, but not everywhere: they are common in the northern and southern regions, while in the western and eastern parts of the country bikes are not popular.

Errors: inconsistent plural usage and misspelling. 'bites' is a misspelling of 'bikes'. Sentence structure is confusing; reorganize to clarify contrast. Use 'they are' to refer back to 'bikes' and 'bikes are not popular' for the negative. Suggestions: fix spelling, keep nouns plural when speaking generally, and use clear contrasts (e.g. 'while', 'but not everywhere').

× They prefer a four wheel vehicle as in cars and two bikes pick up.

✓ They prefer four-wheel vehicles such as cars and pickup trucks with two wheels is incorrect; better: They prefer four-wheel vehicles such as cars and pickup trucks.

Problems: 'a four wheel vehicle' should be hyphenated as 'four-wheel vehicle' when used as an adjective; 'as in cars and two bikes pick up' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended 'cars and pickup trucks'. 'Two bikes pick up' is nonsense. Suggestions: use hyphenation for compound adjectives, use correct nouns ('pickup trucks'), and keep number agreement ('four-wheel vehicles' plural) to match 'they prefer'.