Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatical and provide a brief reason or feeling. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I always wanted one. For example, I used to watch other children ride to school, and I felt I was missing out, so I asked my parents many times but they couldn't afford one.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, correct sentence structure and use linking words to explain reasons. Use specific details or an example and avoid repetitions. Keep to a maximum of five sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For instance, many people use them to commute short distances, especially in crowded cities where traffic is heavy, and there are also many bike lanes and parking areas which encourage cycling.

× Well, I didn't have a bike when I was young, but I wish to had one.

✓ Well, I didn't have a bike when I was young, but I wish I had one.

The error is using 'to had' after 'wish'. After 'wish' when referring to past unreal situations we use the past simple form without 'to' (wish + past simple). 'I wish I had one' expresses regret about the past. Remove 'to' and use 'had'. Suggestion: Use 'I wish I had' for past regrets; avoid adding 'to' before the past verb.

× Well, it's actually it is most popular in my country because it is very easily accessible to any place so that everybody using bike for their own convenience.

✓ Well, actually bicycles are very popular in my country because they are easily accessible to many places, so everybody uses bikes for their own convenience.

Multiple issues fall under pronoun and related agreement: 'it's actually it is' is redundant; 'most popular' needs a subject and article depending on meaning; 'any place' is incorrect—use 'many places' or 'any place' with different structure; 'everybody using bike' lacks a verb and has number mismatch. Corrections: use 'bicycles' (plural) to match 'are', use 'they are' for agreement, use 'many places' or 'any place' appropriately, and use 'everybody uses bikes' (subject-verb agreement and plural noun). Suggestion: Remove redundancy, ensure subject-verb agreement (everybody uses), match plural nouns with plural verbs, and keep clear referents (bicycles/they).