Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise, start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and grammar, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details. Avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I did — I had a red bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood with friends, and on weekends my cousin joined us for longer rides to the park.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with a specific reason or example using linking words. Use natural phrasing and avoid repeating ‘bikes’.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many students and market vendors use bicycles to commute daily, especially in smaller towns.

× I have a bike during my childhood.

✓ I had a bike during my childhood.

The sentence refers to a past period ('childhood'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Using present tense 'have' is incorrect. Change to 'had' to match past reference. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when talking about past time periods (e.g., 'I had', 'I lived', 'I used').

× I used to ride with my friends family.

✓ I used to ride with my friends and family.

The original sentence is missing a coordinating conjunction between 'friends' and 'family' making it unclear. Also, 'friends family' runs words together. Insert 'and' to correctly connect the two nouns. 'Used to' is correct for habitual past actions. Suggestion: Use 'and' between items in a list and ensure separation with commas if needed.

× many people of my country ride bikes

✓ many people in my country ride bikes

The preposition 'of' is not idiomatic in this context; 'people of my country' is awkward. Use 'in my country' to indicate location/possession commonly used with 'people'. Suggestion: Use 'in' when referring to people living within a country or place.

× they're more familiar with bikes.

✓ they are very familiar with bikes.

'More familiar' is a comparative form that requires a comparison target (e.g., 'more familiar with bikes than cars'). As written, it incorrectly suggests comparison without specifying what is being compared. Use 'very familiar' or rephrase with a comparison: 'more familiar with bikes than with cars.' Suggestion: Use 'very familiar' for emphasis without comparison, or provide the object of comparison when using 'more familiar'.