Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a simple topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Correct grammar (past tense), reduce filler words, and avoid redundancy. For example, use linking words like 'After', 'We often', or 'Sometimes' to organize events and include a specific memory or place to make the answer vivid.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. After school, my friends and I often rode to a small park near my house to play and explore. Sometimes we cycled to a nearby riverbank and spent hours racing each other and discovering new paths.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and sentence structure. State your opinion, give one or two specific reasons, and use linking words (because, for example, therefore). Avoid repetition and fillers. Mention who uses bikes and typical purposes (commuting, leisure) with a concrete example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many young people use bikes to travel to college or to meet friends in nearby neighborhoods, and some even take long rides to neighboring towns on weekends.

× Yes I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Pay attention to time markers (when you were a child) and shift verbs to past tense accordingly.

× When I was a child I remember I spending more time when after lifting a school me and my friends are riding bikes and visited unknown places to go with for enjoy.

✓ When I was a child I remember spending more time riding bikes with my friends after school and visiting unknown places for fun.

This sentence has multiple structure and verb form problems: 'I remember I spending' is incorrect; use 'I remember spending' (verb + -ing). 'when after lifting a school' is ungrammatical and should be 'after school'. 'me and my friends are riding bikes' uses wrong word order and tense; use 'riding bikes with my friends'. 'visited' should match the remembering action and be in -ing form or simple past consistent with 'remember spending' — here 'spending ... visiting' is appropriate. Also 'to go with for enjoy' is wrong; use 'for fun'. Suggestions: Break down ideas into smaller clauses, use 'remember + -ing' for recollection, use 'after school' for the time phrase, put the subject before 'with' (riding bikes with my friends), and prefer 'for fun' for enjoyment.

× Yes, of course bikes are most popular in my country, cause, uh, most of the young, younger, younger ones are uh, have a dream to buy their dream by and they really enjoy with their friends to riding uh, to another country or another state or riding nearby surrounding places.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are very popular in my country, because most young people dream of buying a bike and they really enjoy riding with their friends, either to another state or to nearby places.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: 'are most popular' is awkward — 'very popular' is natural. 'cause' should be 'because'. 'most of the young, younger, younger ones are uh, have a dream' mixes structures; use 'most young people dream of' (simple present for general truth). 'buy their dream by' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'buy a bike' or 'buy their dream bike'. 'enjoy with their friends to riding' uses wrong word order and verb form — use 'enjoy riding with their friends'. 'to another country or another state or riding nearby surrounding places' is repetitive and mixed; simplify to 'either to another state or to nearby places'. Suggestions: Use simple present for habitual/general facts (people dream, enjoy), use correct collocations ('dream of', 'buy a bike', 'enjoy riding with'), and simplify repeated ideas.