Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct minor grammar errors (e.g., "I have it" → "I have one now" or "I do"). Also keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. However, my brother taught me how to ride, so I learned on his bike when I was seven. Now I own my own bike and I ride it regularly for short trips.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion first, then explain reasons with specific examples and linking words. Reduce filler words ("umm, uh") and use correct grammar ("Bikes are not popular"; "the roads are not suitable"). Aim for 2–3 sentences with concrete details about infrastructure or culture.

例: In my country, bikes are not very popular because the roads are narrow and there are few bike lanes. In contrast, Zagreb in Croatia is much more bike-friendly, with dedicated cycle paths and bike-sharing schemes, so more people choose to cycle there.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my brother was teaching me how to ride a bike and now I have I have it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my brother taught me how to ride one and now I have it.

The sentence mixes past continuous 'was teaching' with a completed past action and has repetition 'I have I have'. Use simple past 'taught' to indicate a completed action that enabled the speaker to ride; replace 'a bike' with 'one' to avoid repetition and remove the duplicated phrase. Also maintain consistent tense: past for the learning event and present for current possession.

× Bike is not popular in my country, not because of geographical umm uh, surface umm, the road is not compatible for bike roads.

✓ Bicycles are not popular in my country, not because of geography or surface, but because the roads are not suitable for bikes.

Use plural 'Bicycles' (or 'Bikes') when speaking generally. 'Geographical surface' is awkward: use 'geography or surface' or 'the terrain and road surface'. 'Not compatible for bike roads' is ungrammatical; use 'not suitable for bikes' to convey meaning clearly. This corrects noun number and word choice for natural English.

× But now I am living in Croatia and Zagreb is more uh, friendly, uh, for bike riders and here umm I.

✓ But now I live in Croatia, and Zagreb is more friendly for cyclists, and here I...

Use simple present 'I live' for current residence preference in spoken statements. 'Friendly for bike riders' is acceptable but 'friendly for cyclists' is more natural. Remove the trailing incomplete phrase or complete it; keep prepositions and phrasing natural. Also avoid extra fillers. This fixes preposition and phrasing issues.