Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tốt: rõ ràng, có chủ đề chính và chi tiết cụ thể (màu sắc, tuổi, thói quen). Để cải thiện hơn nữa, hãy chú ý đến việc dùng câu kết cấu ngắn gọn hơn để tránh quá dài một câu; có thể thêm một câu ngắn nêu cảm xúc hoặc lý do để làm câu trả lời đầy đủ hơn (tối đa 5 câu).

例: Yes. I had a small red bike that my parents bought for me when I was seven. I used to ride it to the park every afternoon because I loved feeling the fresh air and freedom. It was my favourite way to play with friends.

提案: Câu trả lời hiện tại thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng, nhiều phần lặp và ngắt quãng, thông tin mơ hồ. Để cải thiện, hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề, rồi dùng 1–2 câu hỗ trợ với lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: giao thông, chi phí, sức khỏe, chính sách hỗ trợ), và dùng liên từ phù hợp để kết nối ý (because, so, therefore). Hạn chế tiếng lắp và từ lặp như “eco friendly”.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities and small towns. Many people choose cycling because it is cheap, good for health, and helps reduce traffic congestion. Additionally, recent government initiatives to build bike lanes have made cycling safer and more convenient.

× Yes I did. I had a small red bike that my parents bought for me when I was 7 and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that my parents bought for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs punctuation and a number written as a word for formality. Add a comma after 'Yes' and before 'and' to separate clauses, and write 'seven' instead of '7' in formal spoken/written English. Suggestion: include commas for clarity and spell out small numbers in formal responses.

× Yes, I think many people ride a bike or.

✓ Yes, I think many people ride bikes.

The fragment 'or.' is incomplete and creates a sentence structure error. Also 'ride a bike' is acceptable, but plural 'ride bikes' fits general statement about many people. Suggestion: remove the stray 'or' and use plural to match the generalization.

× To protect environment and friendly eco friendly. Oh yes.

✓ To protect the environment and because it is eco-friendly.

'To protect environment' lacks the definite article 'the.' 'Friendly eco friendly' is redundant and word order is incorrect; the correct adjective form is 'eco-friendly.' Also the fragment 'Oh yes.' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'the environment' and the adjective 'eco-friendly' and combine into a complete clause: 'To protect the environment and because it is eco-friendly.'