Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct tenses and linking words. Correct errors: say “I had a bike” (past), “I used my bike every day to go to cram school” (not crime), and avoid saying both every day and every night unless true. Keep to 2–3 sentences and be natural.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in secondary school. I used it every day to ride to my cram school because it was faster and cheaper than taking the bus.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear opinion first, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘however’). Correct grammar (e.g., “I live in a city”, “crowded traffic can make cycling risky”, “it’s a convenient way to commute”). Use singular/plural correctly and avoid awkward phrasing. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and help people avoid traffic. However, I live in a crowded city where traffic can make cycling risky, so many people prefer public transport for safety.

× Yes, I remember that I have a bike when I was a secondary school student.

✓ Yes, I remember that I had a bike when I was a secondary school student.

Tense mismatch: 'remember' refers to a past memory, so the subordinate clause should use past tense 'had' to match 'was'. Use past tense to describe past possession. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession when referring to childhood memories.

× I use bike every day, every night to go to crime school to study.

✓ I used the bike every day and every night to go to school to study.

Incorrect verb tense and word forms: The activity refers to the past, so 'use' should be 'used'. Also 'bike' needs the article 'the' and 'crime school' is incorrect word choice likely intended 'high school' or 'secondary school' — corrected to 'school'. Combined phrases clarified with 'and'. Suggestion: match tense to past and include articles for specific nouns.

× ...every night to go to crime school to study.

✓ ...every night to go to school to study.

The preposition phrase 'to go to crime school' is incorrect because 'crime' is wrong noun; likely a lexical error. Use 'go to school'. Also 'to study' is redundant but acceptable; keep for emphasis. Suggestion: use correct noun and simple preposition 'go to school'.

× Probably, although I am living a city that can be a little bit dangerous because crowded traffic can lead to some risks about riding when we riding bike, but that it's a convenient tools that for commute.

✓ Probably, although I live in a city that can be a little bit dangerous because crowded traffic can create some risks when we ride bikes, it is still a convenient means of commuting.

Multiple issues corrected while following allowed problem types: 'am living' changed to simple present 'live' for habitual state; missing preposition 'in' added; 'when we riding bike' required verb form 'ride' and plural 'bikes'; 'that it's a convenient tools that for commute' fixed to singular 'it is still a convenient means of commuting'. Suggestions: use simple present for general statements, include correct prepositions, ensure subject-verb forms ('we ride'), match singular/plural and choose correct noun 'means of commuting'.

× ...when we riding bike...

✓ ...when we ride bikes...

Pronoun-verb agreement and verb form: 'we' requires base verb 'ride' not 'riding'. Also 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to agree with 'we' in general statements. Suggestion: use base verb after 'when' for simple present and pluralize nouns when referring to general actions by people.