Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but slightly repetitive and has minor grammatical issues. To improve, make a concise topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases (e.g., "it had" twice), correct grammar ("friends' attention"), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word to make it more natural. Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was decorated with colorful stickers and often caught my friends' attention. For example, I would ride it to the park every afternoon, which helped me make new friends in the neighborhood.

提案: The response answers the question directly and gives a reason, but it is slightly repetitive and wordy. Improve by combining sentences, using linking words (e.g., "because", "therefore"), correcting word order and article use (e.g., "there have also been many accidents"), and adding one specific example or brief comparison to strengthen your point.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because there are few safe cycle lanes. As a result, many people prefer motorbikes or cars; for instance, several serious accidents have occurred on main roads where cyclists had no protection.

× It had stickers on it and it had always attracted my friends attention.

✓ It had stickers on it and it had always attracted my friends' attention.

Possessive form is required for 'friends' to show that the attention belongs to the friends. Add an apostrophe after friends to form the possessive plural 'friends'' (or friends' attention). Also note that 'had always attracted' is acceptable in past perfect but simple past 'always attracted' or 'had always attracted my friends' attention' both can work; here we keep past perfect to preserve the original emphasis.

× I used to use my bike while cycling around my neighborhood.

✓ I used to ride my bike around my neighborhood.

Redundant verb forms: 'use my bike while cycling' is repetitive. In English we usually say 'ride a bike' rather than 'use a bike'. Replacing with 'I used to ride my bike around my neighborhood' is concise and idiomatic and keeps the past habitual meaning.

× Unfortunately not.

✓ Unfortunately, no.

While 'Unfortunately not' is not strictly ungrammatical, in this context answering 'Do you think bikes are popular in your country?' the more natural short answer is 'Unfortunately, no.' This places the adverb 'unfortunately' before the negative 'no' and uses a comma for clarity.

× This is because we do not have suitable roads for bike riders to use safely and there have been also many accidents caused by lack of suitable roads for bikes.

✓ This is because we do not have suitable roads for bike riders to use safely, and there have also been many accidents caused by the lack of suitable roads for bikes.

Article 'the' is needed before 'lack' when referring to a specific problem: 'the lack of suitable roads'. Also word order 'there have been also' is awkward; 'there have also been many accidents' is the natural order. A comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.