Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and fluent. Start with a direct topic sentence and add one or two brief supporting details (why you liked it or a memory). Keep it under five sentences and avoid unnecessary auxiliary emphasis like “did.” Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood, especially on weekends, because it gave me a sense of freedom and helped me make friends. For example, I used to race with my neighbor to the park every Saturday.

提案: Your answer is confusing at the start and has tense and grammar errors. Begin with a clear direct response (Yes or No), then give specific reasons and use correct verb tenses and linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Limit to up to five sentences and avoid contradictory words like “No, yes.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For instance, I often see people cycling to work or school, and bike-sharing schemes in the city have increased their use. As a result, cycling is a common and convenient option for daily travel.

× When I was a child, I did have a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The student used the emphatic past form 'did have' unnecessarily. In simple past statements without emphasis, use the past simple 'had'. Use 'did have' only to add emphasis or contradiction (e.g., 'I did have a bike, even though...'). Replace 'did have' with 'had' for a natural, grammatically correct response.

× No, yes, it's quite popular in my country because whenever I look around I saw a bike everywhere.

✓ Yes, it's quite popular in my country because whenever I look around I see a bike everywhere.

The sentence mixes present tense ('it's', 'look') with past tense 'saw'. To describe a general, current fact use the present simple consistently: 'see' instead of 'saw'. Also remove the contradictory 'No, yes' and begin with 'Yes' to match the positive assertion.