Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and grammatical, which is good. To improve, make it slightly more natural and informative by adding one brief supporting detail or reason using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Avoid repeating words and aim for varied vocabulary (e.g., "own" instead of "have").

例: No, I didn't own a bike when I was a child because my parents preferred to walk with me or use public transport. As a result, I only learned to ride when I was older at a friend's house.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it is repetitive and contains awkward phrasing. Improve coherence by using linking words more smoothly, avoiding repetition (e.g., don't repeat "country" and "so"), and making details more concise and specific. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "inexpensive," "public transport"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "low incomes" instead of "don't have enough salary").

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people have low incomes and cannot afford cars. Consequently, bicycles are an inexpensive and practical way to get around, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult. In rural areas, motorcycles and bicycles are also common for short trips.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because my country is an underdeveloped country, so many people don't have enough salary to afford a car or a van for their family, so a bike is a cheaper option for them.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because it is underdeveloped, so many people do not earn enough to afford a car or a van for their family; therefore, a bicycle is a cheaper option for them.

Errors: repetitive and awkward use of 'my country' and 'country', incorrect collocation 'have enough salary', article and word choice issues ('a bike' vs 'bicycles'). Suggestions: Use 'it' to avoid repetition, use 'bicycles' for formality and consistency, use 'earn enough' or 'have enough income' instead of 'have enough salary', and replace the second 'so' with 'therefore' or a semicolon to improve sentence flow.

× That's why my country bikes are more popular than other vehicles.

✓ That is why bicycles are more popular than other vehicles in my country.

Error: unnatural word order 'my country bikes' is incorrect noun phrase structure. Suggestions: Place 'in my country' at the end and use 'bicycles' as the subject: 'bicycles are more popular than other vehicles in my country.' This corrects word order and improves clarity.