Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases ("how to bike, how to ride a bike"). Use correct tense and articles ("when I was a child").

例: No, I didn't. I wasn't interested in riding when I was a child, and my parents never had the chance to teach me. As a result, I never learned to ride a bike.

提案: Give a direct opinion then support it with a specific example or reason using linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "young people" instead of "youth") and quantify or describe contexts where bikes are common.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many young people use them for leisure and short trips around parks, and bike-sharing schemes have also become more common in cities.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was child because I never had an interest in riding bikes.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I never had an interest in riding bikes.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'child'. The correct expression is 'a child' to indicate being one of the children. Suggestion: include the article 'a' after 'was' when referring to being a child.

× I think also the opportunity had never presented itself for my parents to teach me how to bike, how to ride a bike.

✓ I also think the opportunity never presented itself for my parents to teach me how to ride a bike.

The original mixes past perfect ('had never presented') with simple past context and uses awkward word order. Use simple past 'presented' because the speaker refers to a past situation without a prior reference point requiring past perfect. Also streamline phrasing by placing 'also' earlier and using 'ride a bike' once. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past events and keep natural word order: 'I also think the opportunity never presented itself.'

× They are used by a lot of youth, especially for fun activities.

✓ They are used by a lot of young people, especially for fun activities.

'a lot of youth' is nonstandard: 'youth' as a mass noun can be used but 'a lot of youth' sounds odd; use 'a lot of young people' or 'many young people'. Also 'young people' is clearer for count reference. Suggestion: replace 'a lot of youth' with 'a lot of young people' or 'many young people'.