Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, natural and well-structured with a topic sentence and specific details. To improve further, make the response slightly more concise (avoid repeating obvious info) and use a linking phrase to connect the two parts smoothly. Also, say the age in a full phrase (“when I was about six”) rather than a numeral to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I did. It was a small bright red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought for me when I was about six, and I remember practicing in our driveway until I could ride without support.

提案: The main idea is understandable, but the answer has several grammar and word-choice errors and some unclear phrases. To improve: (1) use correct nouns and collocations (e.g., “mode of transport,” “avoid traffic congestion,” “more economical than cars”); (2) add a linking word to organize reasons (e.g., “because” plus a concise list); (3) give one specific example or statistic to support your point. Keep the response to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient mode of transport. For example, many commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic congestion during rush hour, and in rural areas people rely on them for short trips to the market.

× Many people refer bicycle for shoot Combs because they avoid traffic congestions and are economically compared to cars.

✓ Many people prefer bicycles for short commutes because they avoid traffic congestion and are more economical than cars.

Errors: 'refer' is incorrect verb choice—should be 'prefer'; 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' to match 'many people' (singular/plural issue); 'shoot Combs' appears to be misspelling of 'short commutes'; 'traffic congestions' should be uncountable 'traffic congestion'; 'are economically compared to cars' is wrong word form and comparison structure—use 'are more economical than cars'. Suggestions: use correct collocations (prefer bicycles, short commutes), use uncountable noun 'traffic congestion', and form comparative with 'more ... than'.