Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and remove repetition. For example, use past simple for finished actions and avoid duplicating phrases.

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike during a family vacation when my dad taught me, and after practicing for a few days I finally succeeded. It was a memorable experience because my dad was very patient and I felt proud when I could ride on my own.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason and an example using linking words. Fix grammar (countable nouns, verb forms) and avoid repetition. Use a wider but appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'common', 'trend', 'commuting').

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people are more health-conscious now and use cycling for both exercise and commuting. For instance, cities have added bike lanes and weekend group rides have become common, which shows cycling’s growing popularity.

× I practiced it when I was on the vacation with my family.

✓ I practiced it when I was on vacation with my family.

Use 'on vacation' without the definite article in English when referring to being away for a holiday. 'The vacation' suggests a specific vacation already known; general statement uses 'on vacation.' Keep past tense 'practiced' to match timeframe.

× My dad was the one who taught me to know how to ride a bike and I I have been practice it for awhile until in the end that I finally learned how to ride a bike.

✓ My dad was the one who taught me how to ride a bike, and I practiced it for a while until I finally learned to ride.

Multiple issues: 'taught me to know how to' is wordy and unidiomatic; use 'taught me how to ride.' Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Have been practice' is incorrect: progressive perfect form needs 'have been practicing' but context is simple past, so use 'practiced.' 'Awile' spelled 'a while' (two words). 'Until in the end that' is redundant; use 'until I finally learned.' Also streamline 'learned how to ride' to 'learned to ride.'

× Yes, I agree with that.

✓ Yes, I agree.

While not strictly incorrect, 'I agree with that' is slightly awkward in spoken response; 'I agree' is more natural. If keeping 'with that' is used, it's grammatically fine. No tense change required.

× A lot of people tend to like to exercise nowadays, so biking is one of the exercise that have been popular lately and people tend to exercise a lot.

✓ A lot of people like to exercise nowadays, so biking is one of the exercises that has become popular recently.

Problems: 'tend to like to exercise' is redundant; use 'like to exercise.' 'One of the exercise' must be plural 'exercises.' 'That have been popular' disagrees with singular 'one' and awkward aspect; use 'that has become popular' or 'that are popular.' 'Lately' and 'nowadays' both indicate recent time; use one ('recently' or 'nowadays'). Also avoid repeating 'people tend to exercise a lot.' This correction maintains subject-verb agreement and clearer word choice.