Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, reduce hesitations and redundancy, and follow a clear structure: start with a direct topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details, and avoid filler words (uh, I, I). Correct verb tense (use 'did' or 'had') and use linking words for coherence (for example, 'because' or 'so').

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I usually had to share it with my brother because we only owned one. For example, I often rode it to my tuition classes, so I learned to take turns and plan my trips.

提案: Fix minor grammar/word choice errors and add a specific example to make your answer more vivid. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for instance, moreover) and provide one concrete example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For instance, almost every household owns at least one bike because children use them for play and many adults cycle short distances to work or for exercise; in my neighbourhood, I see dozens of people cycling every morning.

× Yes, I do had a bike when I was a child, but I, I usually had to share it with my brother, uh, because we only had one bike at our home. Uh, I used to ride it, uh, to my tuition.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I usually had to share it with my brother because we only had one bike at home. I used to ride it to my tuition.

The student mixed present auxiliary 'do' with past tense 'had'. This is a present tense construction used incorrectly with a past event. Use simple past 'had' for a past time reference. Also remove filler hesitation and redundant words and adjust 'at our home' to 'at home' for natural usage. Suggestion: When referring to past habits or events, use simple past (I had, I used to) without 'do'.

× Yes, I think by bicycles are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country.

The phrase 'by bicycles' is incorrect: 'by' is an extraneous preposition before the noun. This is an incorrect use of a pronoun/preposition-like word causing a noun phrase error. Remove 'by' so the subject is simply 'bicycles'. Suggestion: Use the noun directly after verbs like 'think' when making a statement about a subject (I think bicycles are...).

× Almost every household has at least one because children ride them for fun and many adults use bikes for exercise or short commutes.

✓ Almost every household has at least one because children ride them for fun and many adults use bicycles for exercise or short commutes.

'Bikes' is acceptable but to match register with 'bicycles' earlier, using 'bicycles' provides consistency; however the core grammatical issue is subject-pronoun agreement: 'Almost every household has at least one' is correct (singular), and 'them' refers back to the plural 'bicycles' which is acceptable. Slight improvement: replace 'bikes' with 'bicycles' for consistency. Suggestion: Maintain consistent singular/plural forms and clear antecedents (household ... one; them refers to bicycles).