Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammatical errors and make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t.”), then briefly add one or two supporting details about why you didn’t or what you did instead. Use correct past tense subject-verb agreement and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I didn’t. My family couldn’t afford one when I was young, so I usually walked to school or took the bus with my friends.

提案: Make the response fluid and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, they are.”), then use linking words (because, so, therefore) to give a clear reason. Be specific about who uses bikes and in what situations. Avoid fillers and confusing tense shifts.

例: Yes, they are. Because bicycles are affordable and convenient, many people use them for short commutes and shopping, especially in smaller towns and among students.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I were a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The clause 'when I were a child' uses the plural verb form 'were' with the singular subject 'I'. In standard English, the past tense of 'to be' with the singular subject 'I' is 'was'. Use 'was' to match the singular subject in past-tense contexts. Suggestion: remember 'I was', 'he/she/it was', 'we/you/they were' for past-tense 'to be'.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Uh. Because it is. It was too cheap and in normal people can easily afford it.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they are cheap and ordinary people can easily afford them.

This response has several issues: (1) 'Because it is.' is a fragment and unclear; sentences should be connected. (2) 'It was too cheap' mixes past tense 'was' with the present-tense context 'are popular' — use present tense 'are' for a current general fact. (3) 'in normal people' is incorrect preposition and word choice; use 'ordinary people' or 'normal people' without 'in'. (4) Pronoun agreement: 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they' and 'them' not 'it'. Combined correction: join clauses, keep present tense, use correct pronouns and prepositions. Suggestion: say 'Because they are cheap and ordinary people can easily afford them.'