Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and add a brief reason or short anecdote to make the answer more natural and informative. Use one clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details, linked smoothly (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes — I had a small red bike when I was about seven. However, my parents rarely let me ride it alone because they were worried about busy streets near our house, so I only rode it in the park with them supervising.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting reasons, using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however'). Avoid filler phrases and correct awkward expressions. Use specific examples (commuters, short distances) and keep sentences fluent and grammatical.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and help commuters avoid heavy traffic. For example, many people who work 9-to-5 cycles to work to save time, and bicycles are often faster than cars during rush hour.

× Yes, I had a bike as a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but sounds repetitive with the question. Using 'when I was a child' matches the examiner's wording and improves naturalness by repeating the time clause from the question.

× However, my parents restricted me from using bikes for security reasons.

✓ However, my parents restricted me from using bikes for safety reasons.

Use 'restricted me from doing something' is acceptable but less natural than 'restricted me from using bikes' could be replaced by 'did not allow me to use bikes' or 'restricted me from using bikes' is OK. The main issue here is word choice: 'security reasons' is incorrect in this context; 'safety reasons' is appropriate when referring to protection from accidents.

× Yes, I believe bikes are very much popular in my country because it serves as a means of transportation or committing to work.

✓ Yes, I believe bikes are very popular in my country because they serve as a means of transportation to get to work.

Problems: 'very much popular' is incorrect — use 'very popular' or 'much more popular'. 'It serves' is wrong because 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they serve' (subject-verb agreement). 'Committing to work' is wrong phrase; use 'getting to work' or 'to get to work'. This correction fixes quantifier usage, subject-verb agreement, and phrasing.

× Especially people that work 9:00 to 5:00.

✓ This is especially true for people who work from 9:00 to 5:00.

Original is a fragment lacking a clear verb and connector. Use 'This is especially true for' to link to previous sentence and 'who work from 9:00 to 5:00' for a correct relative clause. Also include 'from' in the time range.

× It's a much reliable and faster means of transportation.

✓ It's a much more reliable and faster means of transportation.

Comparative phrasing needs 'more' with 'reliable' ('much reliable' is incorrect). When comparing two qualities, 'much more reliable' is correct. Keep 'faster' as comparative adjective. Alternatively, rephrase: 'a more reliable and faster means'.

× You know, in my country they are frequently traffic jams.

✓ You know, in my country there are frequent traffic jams.

Word order and use of 'they are frequently traffic jams' is ungrammatical. The correct existential construction is 'there are frequent traffic jams.' Use 'frequent' rather than 'frequently' because you need an adjective modifying 'traffic jams.'

× Having a bike would deprive you or you know, make your traveling easy.

✓ Having a bike would help you, you know, and make your travel easier.

'Deprive you' is opposite meaning; likely wrong word choice. Use 'help you' meaning make easier. 'Make your traveling easy' is awkward: use 'make your travel easier' or 'make your trips easier.' Also add conjunction 'and' to connect ideas and correct comparative adjective 'easier.'