Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct tense and grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Start by answering directly (Yes/No), then briefly explain why, using past tense for childhood. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid repetitions.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I never learned how to ride. As a result, I always walked or used public transport to go to school. I still want to learn to ride now, so having a bike is on my personal to‑do list.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then explain with specific reasons and use correct vocabulary (e.g., “shared bikes” not “sheep bikes”). Use linking words to connect ideas and fix grammar (subject–verb agreement). Give a brief contrast or example to enrich the answer.

例: Yes and no — shared bikes are available in Hong Kong, but they aren’t very popular for commuting because roads are narrow and traffic is heavy during rush hour. Therefore many people prefer taking buses or the MTR for safety and convenience.

× I do not have a bike when I'm a child because I don't know how to ride a bicycle actually.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because I did not know how to ride a bicycle.

The speaker refers to past time ('when I was a child'), so present tense 'do not have' and 'don't know' are incorrect. Use simple past 'did not have' and 'did not know' to match the time frame. Suggestion: identify the time reference first and consistently use past tense verbs for events in the past.

× But I wish to have one bicycle if I know how to ride a bicycle.

✓ But I wished I had a bicycle if I had known how to ride one (or: But I would have liked a bicycle if I had known how to ride).

The sentence mixes present modal/wish with a past time context. 'Wish' about a past unreal situation usually uses past perfect or past conditional. Better forms: 'I wished I had a bicycle' for a general past desire, or conditional 'I would have liked a bicycle if I had known how to ride.' Suggestion: use past conditional structures for unreal past situations and keep conditional clauses consistent (if + past perfect for unreal past).

× And this is one of my To Do List in my life task, yes.

✓ And this is one of the items on my to-do list in my life.

The phrase 'To Do List' needs hyphenation and lowercase; 'one of my To Do List' is ungrammatical because 'one of' must be followed by a plural noun ('items'). 'In my life task' is awkward; 'in my life' or 'in my life goals' works. Suggestion: use 'one of the items on my to-do list' or 'one of my life goals.'

× Sheep bikes are popular in my country because in Hong Kong the roads are quite narrow and usually there are many buses and minibus during the busy hour makes riding bicycles on the roads is quite dangerous.

✓ Cheap bikes are popular in my country because in Hong Kong the roads are quite narrow, and there are usually many buses and minibuses during busy hours, which makes riding bicycles on the roads quite dangerous.

Original has several problems: 'Sheep bikes' seems a typo for 'cheap bikes' (word choice), 'minibus' should be plural 'minibuses', and sentence structure is faulty ('...buses and minibus during the busy hour makes riding... is quite dangerous' mixes clauses and verbs). The corrected sentence fixes word choice, plural forms, punctuation, and turns the latter clause into a relative clause 'which makes...' to show cause. Suggestion: check word choice for typos, ensure noun number agreement, break complex ideas into clauses and use 'which' or separate sentences to explain consequences.