Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good response: clear topic sentence, relevant supporting details, and a personal story. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a linking word to connect the parts smoothly. Also include one specific detail (e.g., age or a short feeling) to enrich the answer without exceeding length limits.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon until it got dark. When I was about six, my father taught me how to balance, which made me feel proud and more confident.

提案: The answer is short and contains an unclear phrase (“we use that in the road every time”). To improve: give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example: reasons, where people ride, or who uses them). Correct the phrasing to sound natural.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips in cities and rural areas because they are affordable and convenient, especially during rush hour.

× I used to ride it around neighborhood every afternoon until it got dark.

✓ I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon until it got dark.

Missing definite article + preposition usage: 'neighborhood' referring to a specific area requires the definite article 'the' in English when preceded by 'around'. Add 'the' to make the phrase 'around the neighborhood'. Suggestion: Use 'the neighborhood' when referring to the area where you lived: 'ride it around the neighborhood.'

× In the Philippines, we use that in the road every time.

✓ In the Philippines, we use bikes on the road all the time.

Incorrect pronoun and preposition choice plus adverb phrase: 'that' is vague and doesn't refer clearly to 'bikes'; use 'bikes' or 'them'. The preposition for traveling on a road is 'on' not 'in'. 'Every time' is unnatural here; 'all the time' or 'often' fits better. Suggestion: Say 'we use bikes on the road all the time' or 'people often ride bikes on the road.'