Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify the question and answer directly. The student misunderstood and repeated the examiner's question incorrectly. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two supporting details (where you rode it, who taught you, or how often) using linking words. Keep the answer natural, concise, and within five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, and my older brother taught me how to balance. Because we lived near a quiet park, it was a safe place to practice and improve my skills.

提案: Directly state your opinion first, then give specific reasons and examples. The student’s reply is confusing and off-topic. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and brief reason), then support it with details about who uses bikes, for what purpose, and how common they are, using linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'however'.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, students often cycle to school, and some neighborhoods have a strong cycling culture with weekend bike groups.

× Did you have a bike when you were with your child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

The student used 'with your child' which changes meaning and is incorrect in context. The examiner asked about the student's childhood; the correct pronoun phrase is 'a child'. Replace the incorrect phrase with 'a child' to match the intended time reference. Suggestion: use 'when you were a child' for asking about someone's childhood.

× You don't think so? Because here in the Philippines, most of the kids play actual games.

✓ You don't think so? Here in the Philippines, most kids play physical games.

Two issues: 'most of the kids' is grammatical but 'most kids' is more natural in general statements; this is a minor article/quantifier style adjustment (related to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure). Also 'actual games' is unclear and unnatural; 'physical games' or 'outdoor games' better conveys contrast with digital games. Additionally, starting the second sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment when used alone; removing 'Because' fixes the sentence structure. Suggestion: avoid starting a sentence with 'Because' unless you complete the clause; choose clearer adjectives like 'physical' or 'outdoor' instead of 'actual.'