Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct tense and simpler structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like "uh" and unclear phrases such as "practice a bag."

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about eight, and I often rode it to the nearby park. For example, every Saturday morning I practiced riding with my friends, which helped me become more confident and steady.

提案: Correct grammar and use linking words to make the answer coherent. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons or examples. Use plural and possessive forms properly and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For instance, many people cycle to work or school, especially in crowded cities, since it is faster than walking and easier than finding a parking space.

× Yes, of course. Uh, when I was a child, I have a bike to I cycle back to go to the park and I practice a bag.

✓ Yes, of course. Uh, when I was a child, I had a bike that I used to cycle to the park and I practiced (or 'played') with a bag.

This sentence contains several errors that map to multiple grammar problem types: past tense issue (ID 5) because the speaker describes a past situation but uses 'have' instead of the past form 'had'; sentence structure errors (ID 26) because clause order and connectors are incorrect ('to I cycle back to go to the park' is ungrammatical); incorrect pronoun/article/word choice (ID 12/22) and verb form issues (ID 8/9) as 'practice a bag' is unclear. Correction details: use past tense 'had' for past situations; replace 'have a bike to I cycle back to go to the park' with a clear relative clause 'that I used to cycle to the park' or 'and I used it to cycle to the park'; clarify 'I practice a bag' to 'I practiced with a bag' or better 'I played with a bag' depending on intended meaning. Suggestions: keep past-tense verbs consistent when describing past events; use relative clauses ('that'/'which') to connect nouns and actions; choose appropriate verb collocations ('practice with' for skills, 'play with' for toys).

× Of course, many people's ride bike, go to the work or go study is very convenient for people.

✓ Of course. Many people ride bikes to work or school because it is very convenient.

This sentence has subject-verb agreement and pluralization errors (ID 1 and 27): 'people's ride bike' incorrectly uses the possessive 'people's' and singular 'bike'; correct form is 'many people ride bikes'. There are preposition and article issues (ID 11 and 22) in 'go to the work' and wrong noun choice 'go study' — use 'go to work' or 'go to school'/'go to study' depending on meaning. Also sentence structure is awkward (ID 26); split ideas and use a clear reason clause: 'because it is very convenient.' Suggestions: use base plural nouns with plural verbs for plural subjects ('people ride bikes'); avoid unnecessary possessive; use standard collocations 'ride bikes', 'go to work', 'go to school'; form a clear main clause and a reason clause with 'because'.