Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is correct but too short and lacks detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details (e.g., when you had it, who gave it to you, how often you rode it, or a brief memory). Use one linking word if adding more than one detail. Keep it natural and within 3–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about seven years old, and my parents bought it for me as a birthday present. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, and I remember learning to balance with my father’s help.

提案: Your answer answers the question but has grammar, vocabulary and coherence issues. Use a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, specific supporting details, and linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences with relevant examples or reasons why bikes are popular.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children ride bikes for fun, and some adults use them for daily commuting because they are cheap and convenient. In addition, cities with bike lanes have encouraged more people to cycle regularly.

× Yes, it is.

✓ Yes, they are.

The student refers to 'bikes' which is plural, so the pronoun should also be plural. Using 'it' (singular) is incorrect. Change to 'they are' to match the plural subject. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× Most of the kids play it and some adults use it as a means of transportation, going to places, the places.

✓ Most of the kids ride them and some adults use them as a means of transportation, to go to places.

The sentence contains plural noun 'kids' and 'adults' but uses singular object pronoun 'it'; also verb choice 'play' is odd for bikes—'ride' is more appropriate. 'Going to places, the places' is redundant and ungrammatical. Correct by using plural pronouns 'them', using 'ride', and a concise phrase 'to go to places'. Suggestion: match pronoun number, choose appropriate verbs for actions (ride for bicycles), and avoid redundant phrases.