Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, verb tenses and sentence structure; make answers more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense consistency (e.g., 'stayed', 'holidays') and articles ('my grandfather's house', 'the farm'). Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., 'The Dirty paint') by choosing accurate vocabulary.

例: Yes, I did. I often stayed at my grandfather's house in the countryside during school holidays, and I had a small red bicycle that I rode around the farm. For example, I used to race my cousin along the dirt path behind the barn, which was great fun.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more logical. Begin with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons linked clearly with connectors (because, for example). Fix grammar and word choice: use 'many' laws is vague—say 'traffic rules and bike-friendly infrastructure' and correct phrases like 'it saves energy' and finish the thought. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. This is because many cities have dedicated bicycle lanes and supportive traffic rules, so riding is safer and more convenient. For example, people often cycle to work to save money and reduce energy use.

× Yes I did. When I was young I often stay at my grandfather house in the countryside during school holiday and I had a small red bicycle that I rode around the farm.

✓ Yes I did. When I was young I often stayed at my grandfather's house in the countryside during school holidays and I had a small red bicycle that I rode around the farm.

Multiple past-tense and related errors: 'often stay' should be 'often stayed' to match past time context (past tense issue). Use of possessive requires 'grandfather's' (article/possessive; treated here as past tense context correction). 'School holiday' should be plural 'school holidays' for typical usage. Suggestion: use past tense verbs consistently for past events and include possessive 's' for ownership; use plural when referring to recurring holiday periods.

× I remember racing my cousin along The Dirty paint.

✓ I remember racing my cousin along the dirt path.

Original sentence has incorrect noun phrase 'The Dirty paint' which is likely a wrong word choice and capitalization; this is a sentence structure/word choice issue. Replace with 'the dirt path' which fits context and corrects capitalization. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns and use lower case for common nouns; ensure prepositional phrase 'along the dirt path' is natural.

× Yes, I do, because in my country they have a lot of laws and they have the bicycle lane and you can ride it.

✓ Yes, I do, because in my country there are many laws and bicycle lanes, so you can ride a bike.

Problems: awkward structure and repeated 'they have' and incorrect article usage. Replaced with 'there are' (there be) and 'many' for quantity (uses 'there are' to introduce existence). Also 'bicycle lane' should be plural 'bicycle lanes' if speaking generally; 'a bike' is more natural than 'it'. Suggestion: use 'there are' to state existence, use plural for general statements, and avoid repeating verbs unnecessarily.

× Anyway is save the energy and you don't.

✓ Anyway, it saves energy and you don't need to use as much fuel.

Original lacks subject and has wrong verb form: 'is save' is ungrammatical (missing subject and incorrect verb form), so add subject 'it' and use third person singular 'saves' (third person singular issue). Also 'you don't' is incomplete; clarified to 'you don't need to use as much fuel' to express intended meaning. Suggestion: always include a subject and ensure verb agrees in person and number; complete the clause to convey full meaning.