Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 반복되고 문법 및 표현 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 주제 문장으로 명확히 답하고, 불필요한 중복을 피하세요. 시제와 숫자 표현(나이, 기간)을 정확히 하고 대중교통을 언급할 때는 단어 선택을 정리하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유나 현재 상황을 간단히 덧붙이면 답이 자연스럽습니다. 예: 간단한 과거 설명 → 현재 상황 비교 → 이유(간단한 이유 한두 문장).

例: Yes. I started learning to ride a bike when I was five and continued until I was about six. I don't have a bike now, though, because I usually use public transport or a trainer for exercise.

提案: 답은 비교적 명확하지만 문장이 반복되고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 주제 문장(Yes/No + 이유)을 먼저 말하고, 연결어를 사용해 구체적인 이유와 예시를 덧붙이세요. ‘public traffic’ 대신 ‘public transport’ 또는 ‘public transportation’이 자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘workspaces’보다는 ‘workplaces’가 적절합니다. 숫자와 일반화 표현을 사용할 때는 ‘usually’, ‘often’ 같은 빈도부사를 적절히 배치하세요.

例: Not really. Bicycles are common among children and teenagers, but most people stop riding them in their twenties because they start commuting to work. As a result, many adults prefer buses or other public transportation when their workplace is far from home.

× I had to bike when I was when I was 5 and until 6:00.

✓ I learned to ride a bike when I was 5 and had it until I was 6.

The original is unclear and uses incorrect phrasing 'had to bike' which implies obligation. Use past tense verbs correctly: 'learned to ride a bike' for acquiring the skill and 'had it until I was 6' to indicate possession over a time period. Also remove the duplicated phrase 'when I was'. Suggestions: use 'learned to ride' or 'started riding' and specify 'until I was 6' for clarity.

× But nowadays I do not have a bike.

✓ But nowadays I do not have a bike.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present simple is appropriate to describe current state. No change needed.

× I'm I'm just using trainer.

✓ I'm just using a trainer.

The sentence had a duplicated 'I'm' and is missing the article 'a' before 'trainer'. Add 'a' to form a correct noun phrase: 'using a trainer'. If 'trainer' means 'stationary bike' or 'personal trainer', choose the appropriate word. Also remove duplicated 'I'm'.

× I'm just using bus.

✓ I'm just taking the bus.

'Using bus' is unidiomatic in English. Use the verb 'take' with 'bus' and include the definite article 'the' when referring to a mode of public transport: 'taking the bus'. If meaning 'using buses generally', you could say 'I use the bus'.

× Yes.

✓ Yes.

Single-word response 'Yes' is acceptable; no grammatical correction required.

× Not really.

✓ Not really.

Short negative answer is fine as is; no change needed.

× People in my country usually have a bike until they're about 20, but after that people use people take buses or public traffic because they have workspaces further from their home.

✓ People in my country usually have a bike until they're about 20, but after that they take buses or other public transport because their workplaces are farther from home.

Multiple issues: repetition 'people use people take' must be corrected to a single pronoun 'they'. 'Public traffic' is incorrect; use 'public transport' or 'public transportation'. 'Workspaces' is an uncommon collocation here; use 'workplaces'. Use comparative 'farther' for physical distance and remove the definite article 'their home' to 'home' or keep 'their homes'. Suggestions: streamline pronouns, choose correct collocations ('take buses', 'public transport', 'workplaces'), and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct adjective choice for distance.