Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a direct response with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and brief detail), then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Keep answers natural, avoid repetition, and limit to up to five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in the park near my house. Because I practiced almost every day, I became confident riding without the training wheels within a month.

提案: The student answers affirmatively but the response has grammatical errors, repetition, and vague phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and use linking words (for example, because, especially, for instance). Improve grammar (use possessive/plural forms and correct word choices) and avoid filler words. Keep the reply concise (2–4 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in older towns. For example, many people of all ages use bicycles for short trips and commuting because they are cheap and convenient. In particular, older men often ride bikes in historic city centers where streets are narrow and traffic is slow.

× And yes, in my country many people's young and old use bikes for transfer and and especially old men use bikes in old cities like.

✓ Yes, in my country many people, young and old, use bikes for transportation, and especially older men use bikes in older parts of cities.

Multiple issues: incorrect use of 'people's' (possessive) instead of 'people' is a pronoun/noun error; 'young and old' needs commas to clarify it modifies 'people'; 'for transfer' is incorrect collocation — use 'for transportation'; the repeated 'and and' is a typo/structure error; 'old men' -> 'older men' is more natural when comparing age groups; 'old cities like' is incomplete and should be 'older parts of cities' or followed by examples. Suggestions: remove the possessive apostrophe, add commas around the phrase 'young and old', use 'transportation', delete the duplicate 'and', use 'older men' and rephrase the ending to be complete.