Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng còn lặp ý và thiếu cụ thể. Cần mở đầu rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "really good thing" lặp hai lần), thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: bạn đi xa bao nhiêu, bạn đã học kỹ năng gì) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bicycle when I was eight so I could ride to school every day. It was very useful because it saved time and helped me become more independent. For example, I could reach school in ten minutes instead of walking for half an hour, which also gave me more time to study.

提案: Câu trả lời đúng hướng nhưng có lỗi phát âm/viết ("Buys" thay vì "Bikes"), ngập ngừng và thiếu ví dụ cụ thể. Nên dùng từ vựng chính xác, thêm một liên từ để nối ý và đưa ví dụ hoặc số liệu ngắn để cụ thể hóa (ví dụ: "many people cycle to work" hoặc "bike lanes in cities"). Giữ câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh tiếng ừ ờ.

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes have become more popular recently, especially among young people who cycle for exercise and socialising. For instance, many cities now have bike lanes and group rides at weekends, which encourages more people to ride regularly.

× When I was a child my parents bought me a bicycle to help me commute to school more easily.

✓ When I was a child, my parents bought me a bicycle to help me commute to school more easily.

The original sentence is correct in tense but missing a comma after the introductory time phrase 'When I was a child'. Add the comma to improve readability and match standard punctuation for introductory clauses. Suggestion: insert a comma after introductory adverbial phrases.

× I feel it is a really good thing.

✓ I thought it was a really good thing.

The question and surrounding context describe past events ('When I was a child', 'bought me'), so the verb should be in the past tense to maintain sequence of tenses. Using present tense 'I feel' creates a tense mismatch. Suggestion: use past tense 'I thought' or 'It was' to match the context.

× It was really good thing for me because it's more convenient and helpful.

✓ It was a really good thing for me because it was more convenient and helpful.

There are three issues: missing article 'a' before 'really good thing' (article error), tense inconsistency (mixing past 'It was' with present 'it's'), and slightly awkward adjective choice. According to the allowed list, address article and tense as sentence-structure-related errors. Correction: add 'a' and change 'it's' to 'it was' to keep past-tense consistency. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense throughout the sentence and include necessary articles.

× Buys are gaining more and more popularity these days, especially for the young.

✓ Bikes are gaining more and more popularity these days, especially among young people.

The word 'Buys' is a typo and causes subject confusion; it should be 'Bikes'. Also 'for the young' is unnatural; use 'among young people'. This is a subject-word choice and agreement/word form problem. Suggestion: correct typos and choose natural collocations: 'gaining popularity among young people.'

× They use bicycle as a way to exercise to improve their physical health and also umm, riding bikes with friends.

✓ They use bicycles as a way to exercise to improve their physical health and also ride bikes with friends.

Multiple issues: 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' to match plural subject 'They' (singular/plural issue), and the second activity should use the base verb form 'ride' to parallel 'use' (parallel structure/verb form). The original mixes 'use... to exercise' with 'riding', creating non-parallel structure. Suggestion: make nouns and verbs agree in number and keep parallel structure: 'use bicycles... and also ride bikes with friends.'