Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer clearer, grammatical and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct past tense and pronoun errors, and replace unclear phrases (e.g. “afraid from the fruit”) with the intended reason (e.g. safety or cost). Keep the answer to no more than five concise sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I often asked my parents to buy one, but they refused because they were worried about my safety. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public transport instead.

提案: Make the response more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason and an example using linking words (for example, because, however). Correct grammar (e.g. “short distances”, “prefer”, remove unclear phrase “advise people”). Use precise vocabulary like “affordable” and “practical”. Keep it concise.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country for short distances because they are affordable and practical. For example, many students and young workers ride bicycles to school or nearby markets to save time and money.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child but I usually used to ask my parents to to buy one for me.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I usually used to ask my parents to buy one for me.

The sentence has an extra 'to' creating a duplicated infinitive marker ('to to buy'). Remove the extra 'to' to form the correct infinitive 'to buy'. The rest of the sentence correctly uses past tense ('didn't have', 'used to ask') for a past habitual action.

× But always they you refuse because they afraid from the fruit.

✓ But they always refused because they were afraid of the cost.

Multiple issues: pronoun order and form were incorrect ('they you refuse' is ungrammatical). Also 'afraid from the fruit' is incorrect; English uses 'afraid of' and 'fruit' is likely a wrong noun here—context suggests 'cost' or 'expense'. I corrected verb tense to past ('refused') to match earlier past context and used the correct preposition 'afraid of'. If the intended word was different, replace 'cost' with the intended noun.

× Yes, bikes are very common in my country for short distance.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common in my country for short distances.

Use the plural 'short distances' when referring to a general, repeated notion of short trips. The preposition 'for' is acceptable, but the noun should be plural to match general usage.

× Many people, especially children and students are preferred to advise people they are cheap and convenient.

✓ Many people, especially children and students, prefer them because they are cheap and convenient.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and verb choice: 'are preferred to advise people' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that many people prefer bikes; use the verb 'prefer' with the object 'them' (bikes). Also add a comma after the introductory phrase and connect the reason with 'because'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and clarifies meaning.