Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more confident and expand your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (“uh”) and keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use a linking word to add a reason or brief explanation.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, my parents bought me a scooter because it was cheaper and safer for our neighborhood. As a result, I used public transport more often to go to school.

提案: Answer directly and clearly with a topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and a reason. Remove hesitation and unclear fragments. Use linking words (however, because, since) to make your response coherent and logical. Keep it within five sentences.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars because they are more comfortable and convenient for long distances. However, bikes are becoming slightly more common in big cities for short trips and exercise.

× Oh no, I don't. Uh, in my country. Oh, cars are more popular than bikes? Uh, because Kai is Mary Kay's?

✓ Oh no, I don't think so. In my country, cars are more popular than bikes because they are more convenient.

The original contains fragmented sentences, a question mark where a statement is intended, and an unclear phrase 'Kai is Mary Kay's' that appears to be a mispronunciation or noise. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine fragments into a complete, coherent sentence: use 'I don't think so' to answer the question, follow with a clear clause 'In my country, cars are more popular than bikes' and give a reason 'because they are more convenient.' Avoid unnecessary fillers and unclear words. Suggestions: remove filler words (uh), ensure statements end with a period, and replace unclear words with clear nouns or pronouns referring to cars or bikes.