Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clear, grammatically correct sentences and logical sequence. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two or three specific supporting details (where the bike came from, how long you had it, and why you stopped using it). Use past tense consistently and simple linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “then”). Avoid repetition and unclear words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it from my older sister when she became an adult and no longer needed it. I used the bike for about five years because it was convenient for getting to school. However, I stopped riding it when our family moved to a different area where cycling was difficult.

提案: Give a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and examples. Use accurate vocabulary (bike/bicycle, popular, economy, city) and simple linking words (for example, because, however). Keep answers concise and relevant to the question—avoid unrelated words.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Because many people cannot afford cars and cities are crowded, bicycles are an inexpensive and practical way to travel. For example, many students and workers ride bikes to commute short distances every day.

× Yes, when I was child I have a bite but my parents not bite to me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike but my parents did not buy one for me.

Multiple sentence structure issues: missing article 'a' before 'child' and 'bike'; wrong verbs 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was'; 'bite' and 'bite to me' are incorrect words and phrasing (likely meant 'bike' and 'buy one for me'); negative form requires auxiliary 'did not' in past tense. Suggestion: use correct nouns, include articles, and use past simple with did for negatives.

× I just get it from my sister when she become to adult and he don't need anymore and I get the by and for five years and I threw it because I need to go back.

✓ I just got it from my sister when she became an adult and she didn't need it anymore. I had the bike for five years and then I threw it away because I needed to move back.

Pronoun errors: 'he' used instead of 'she' for sister; inconsistent tense forms—mix of present and past; incorrect verbs: 'get' should be past 'got', 'become to adult' should be 'became an adult'; 'get the by' unclear, corrected to 'had the bike'; 'threw it' needs 'away' to indicate disposal; negatives in past require 'didn't'. Suggestion: maintain past tense, match pronouns to nouns, and use common verb phrases (got, had, threw away).

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Yes, I think pies very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

Wrong noun 'pies' instead of 'bikes'; missing verb 'are' in the clause; use present simple 'are' to express general fact. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and include the linking verb 'are' for adjective complements.

× My country is fooding and is not not have a high economic like Tojima city.

✓ My country is poor and does not have a strong economy like Tojima city.

'fooding' is not correct adjective; double negative 'not not' is wrong; 'have a high economic' is ungrammatical—use noun 'economy' and adjective 'strong' or 'developed'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'my country does not have'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives/nouns and avoid double negatives.

× So they use buy gold to work every day and we enjoy that.

✓ So they usually buy goods to work every day and we rely on that.

Phrase 'use buy gold' is incorrect: likely meant 'buy goods' (items) not 'gold'; 'use' unnecessary; 'enjoy that' is odd in context—probably 'rely on that' or 'make a living from that'. Suggestion: select correct verbs and nouns to convey meaning, and use adverbs like 'usually' for habits.