Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but could be more natural and slightly more specific. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases like “used to” twice in quick succession. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., ride, cycle, neighborhood) to sound more natural.

例: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it around our neighborhood and raced with friends after school, which helped me stay active and make friends.

提案: Your idea is understandable but the answer has grammatical errors, unclear words (e.g., “chapter”), and repetition. Give a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting reasons or examples with linking words. Use correct vocabulary (children, kids) and avoid filler phrases like “well” and “yeah” in formal tests.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many children ride bikes to school or to play in the evening, and in some cities cycling is also a common way for adults to commute because it is cheap and healthy.

× Well, yeah, I think so too, cause a lot of chapter, a lot of kids used to play, used to play with the bike around my area.

✓ Well, yeah, I think so too, because a lot of children used to play with bikes around my area.

The sentence contains informal or incorrect conjunction 'cause' which should be 'because' in formal speech (ID 16). 'Chapter' is a wrong word; 'children' is the correct plural noun (ID 1). The phrase 'used to play, used to play with the bike' is repetitive; condense to a single 'used to play with bikes'. Also change 'the bike' to the plural 'bikes' to match general meaning. Suggestions: replace 'cause' with 'because', use 'children' instead of 'chapter', remove repetition and use plural noun 'bikes' for general reference.