Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Fix verb tense and remove filler words. For example, say whether you had a bike in the past, mention your current situation briefly, and explain why you want one using a reason or short example.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I’ve always loved cycling, and even now I don’t own one. Because I commute short distances in the city, I would like to buy a bike to save money and exercise more.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples; use linking words to organise your points and avoid fillers. Mention who uses bikes, in what situations, and one specific advantage. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and check grammar (e.g., "I live in Dhaka," "bikes are convenient for short trips").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities like Dhaka. Many people use them for short trips because they are cheaper and can navigate traffic more easily. For example, students and delivery workers often prefer bicycles to save time and money.

× No I never have any bike or not even now uh but I love to ride bike so I would like to buy one as I am now an an adult mature adult so ever.

✓ No, I never had a bike, not even now, but I love riding bikes so I would like to buy one now that I am an adult.

Errors: wrong tense 'never have' should be past 'never had' for childhood; 'not even now' conflicts with 'never had' so rephrased; 'love to ride bike' -> prefer 'love riding bikes' (gerund and plural); redundant words 'an an mature adult so ever' removed and rephrased as 'now that I am an adult'. Suggestion: use past simple for past situations, use gerund after 'love', pluralize 'bike' when speaking generally, and avoid redundant words. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, I think bikes are popular because I am living in Dhaka and here uh bike is so uh good to move uh whenever we want to go anywhere uh so it is so easy to move and ride and you can.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular because I live in Dhaka, and here bikes are very convenient for getting around whenever we want to go somewhere, so it is easy to ride them.

Errors: 'I am living' is grammatically acceptable but for habitual situations use simple present 'I live'; 'here uh bike is so uh good to move' has article and noun-number issues: use plural 'bikes' and 'convenient for getting around'; 'go anywhere' -> 'go somewhere' fits better; sentence fragment 'and you can' was incomplete so completed as 'ride them'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual facts, match noun number with context, use appropriate prepositions ('get around'), and avoid sentence fragments by completing verbs.