Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, expand briefly, and be natural. Use past tense for childhood, give a topic sentence then a supporting detail. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and avoid one-word answers. For example, say whether you had one and add a short detail about how you used it or why it mattered.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to school and to visit my friends, which helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Clarify meaning, correct grammar, use specific examples, and improve coherence with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "running yarns and shutters"). Begin with a clear opinion, then add 1–2 specific reasons or examples linked by words like "because" or "for example." Keep sentences natural and concise.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to go to the local market, and they are especially common in smaller towns where distances are short.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child). The student used present perfect 'I have', which is inappropriate for a simple past question. Use the simple past 'did' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: respond with 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, I read because bikes are very popular in our country because many people have traditionally ridden them.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because many people have traditionally ridden them.

The original sentence contains 'I read' which does not make sense in context; likely the student meant 'I think'. Also there are two 'because' conjunctions creating redundancy; keep a single 'because' linking reason. Ensure verb tense 'have traditionally ridden' is appropriate (present perfect for past habit continuing to present). Suggestion: use 'I think' to express opinion and keep one 'because'.

× People often use bicycle for communicating and running yarns and shutters, going to the market or visiting nearby friends.

✓ People often use bicycles for commuting, running errands, going to the market, or visiting nearby friends.

Several errors: 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue). 'Use ... for communicating' is unnatural; 'commuting' is correct (verb + -ing form). 'Running yarns and shutters' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'running errands'. 'Errands' is the correct noun (quantifier/word choice). Also add commas to separate items in the list for clear sentence structure. Suggestion: replace 'communicating' with 'commuting', 'running yarns and shutters' with 'running errands', and use plural 'bicycles'.