Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and a linking word if adding detail. For example, say when you had the bike, how often you used it, and one short reason or memory.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to school because it was faster than walking, and I remember racing with my friends on weekends.

提案: Make the statement more natural and precise. Use general subject pronouns, correct vocabulary (transportation, not transformation), and give a specific reason or brief example. Use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, because, so, therefore).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient form of transportation. For example, many people use bikes to travel short distances in crowded cities because they are easy to park and cost nothing to fuel.

× Yes, I do have my bike when I was a child and I used this bike when I want to go to school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I used it to go to school.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do have') with past time reference ('when I was a child'), causing a tense inconsistency. Also 'when I want' is present but should be past ('wanted' or 'to go'). 'My bike' as object is acceptable but 'it' is more natural. Correct by using simple past 'had' and 'used' and the infinitive 'to go' for purpose: 'I used it to go to school.' Suggestion: keep all verbs in the past when referring to past situations: 'had', 'used', 'wanted' or use 'to' + verb for purpose.

× Our bikes are very popular in our country because it is more convenient to use as transformation rather than using a motorcycle.

✓ Bicycles are very popular in my country because they are more convenient for transportation than motorcycles.

Multiple issues: 'Our bikes' and 'it' create pronoun-antecedent confusion; 'bikes' is plural so use 'they' (pronoun error). 'Transformation' is the wrong noun; use 'transportation.' The comparative structure should be 'more convenient for X than Y.' Also 'using a motorcycle' is less concise than 'motorcycles.' Correct by: use clear noun 'bicycles', match plural pronoun 'they', use correct noun 'transportation', and structure the comparison properly. Suggestion: use consistent plurality and the phrase 'more convenient for transportation than motorcycles.'