Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (use past tense and correct auxiliaries), clarity and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'so') and avoid irrelevant words ('Music'). Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. I really wanted a bike, so I promised myself that I would buy one when I grew up. Eventually I saved up and bought a second-hand bike when I was a teenager.

提案: Make the answer more natural and precise. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and use linking words like 'because', 'for example' and 'as a result'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'young people' not 'youth boys') and avoid vague phrases like 'It's a very wide.'

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many young people use them for daily travel and leisure. For example, students often ride to school and groups of friends organize weekend rides, so you see bikes everywhere in cities and towns.

× No, I don't have any bike when I watch child because my father don't have that much money.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my father didn't have that much money.

This sentence mixes present tense with past context. The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used for actions and states ('didn't have', 'was a child'). Also 'any bike' is unnatural here; use 'a bike'. Subject-verb agreement error with 'father don't' should be 'father didn't'. Suggestion: Use past simple consistently for past events: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my father didn't have that much money.'

× But I want the bike that time.

✓ But I wanted a bike at that time.

The sentence uses present tense 'want' while referring to a past time ('that time'), so past tense 'wanted' is required. Also use the article 'a bike' rather than 'the bike' when referring to wanting one in general. Suggestion: Say 'But I wanted a bike at that time.'

× But I thought when I was grow when I was grown up, I will buy.

✓ But I thought when I grew up, I would buy one.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'when I was grow' is incorrect—use past simple 'when I grew up' or 'when I was grown' (less natural). When reporting past thought about the future, use backshift: 'would' instead of 'will'. Also add 'one' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: 'But I thought when I grew up, I would buy one.'

× Music.

✓ (Remove the word 'Music' as it is irrelevant)

The isolated word 'Music' is a fragment and unrelated to the answer, creating a sentence without a verb and unclear meaning. Either remove it or expand into a complete sentence if intended (e.g., 'I like music.'). Suggestion: Remove the word or clarify intent.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because every youth boys have bike and craze about bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many young boys have bikes and are crazy about them.

Use plural 'bikes' and 'many young boys' instead of 'every youth boys'. 'Youth' is uncountable; use 'young boys' or 'young people'. Also verb forms: 'have bike' should be 'have bikes'. 'Craze about bike' is incorrect; use 'are crazy about them' or 'are enthusiastic about bikes'. Suggestion: 'Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many young boys have bikes and are crazy about them.'

× It's a very wide.

✓ They are very common.

The phrase 'It's a very wide' is ungrammatical and vague; 'wide' is an adjective that needs a noun (wide road, wide area). In context, the speaker likely means bikes are widespread or common. Use 'They are very common' or 'Biking is very popular'. Suggestion: Replace with 'They are very common.'