Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more fluent, correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details linked with connectors. Correct tense and noun/adjective order (e.g., 'a blue bike'). Be specific about how you used the bike and use linking words such as 'and' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I had a small blue bike when I was a child. I used it to visit different places in my hometown, such as the park and my grandparents’ house, and it helped me get around easily.

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a topic sentence, then explain reasons using linking words ('because', 'so', 'therefore') and give a short, specific example or contrast. Use plural form 'bicycles' and correct modal/tense (e.g., 'cannot afford' or 'can’t afford').

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in the Philippines because many people cannot afford motorcycles. As a result, bicycles are widely used for short journeys and by students commuting to school.

× Yes, I had a bike when when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence has a repeated word 'when when', which is not a grammar category listed but creates a sentence structure error (26) and should be removed. Remove the duplicate to make the sentence fluent and correct: 'when when' -> 'when'. Suggestion: proofread to avoid repeated words and read the sentence aloud to catch duplicates.

× It was color blue and it was very small.

✓ It was blue and very small.

The phrase 'color blue' is incorrect English word order and choice. Use the adjective 'blue' directly after the verb 'was'. Also 'it was very small' is correct but can be combined for conciseness. Suggestion: use 'It was blue and very small.' Note: This fits the 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' category (13).

× I used it. To go with different vacation on my hometown.

✓ I used it to go on different trips in my hometown.

The original has a sentence fragment 'To go with different vacation on my hometown' and incorrect preposition use ('on my hometown'). This involves sentence structure errors (26) and incorrect use of prepositions (11). Correct structure: 'I used it to go on different trips in my hometown.' Suggestions: combine fragments into one sentence, use 'go on trips' or 'go on vacations' and use 'in my hometown.'

× Yes, bicycle is very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in our country.

The noun 'bicycle' should be plural when speaking generally. Also the verb must agree: use plural noun 'bicycles' and plural verb 'are'. This is a singular/plural issue (1) and subject-verb agreement (27). Suggestion: use plural when making general statements about a category: 'Bicycles are very popular.'

× Here in the Philippines.

✓ Here in the Philippines, many people use bicycles.

'Here in the Philippines.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb (sentence without a verb - 23 and sentence structure error - 26). Combine with a main clause or attach to the previous sentence. Suggestion: expand to a full sentence, e.g., 'Here in the Philippines, many people use bicycles.'

× Many people couldn't afford motorcycle so that they only use bicycle.

✓ Many people couldn't afford motorcycles, so they only use bicycles.

Count nouns 'motorcycle' and 'bicycle' should be plural when speaking generally. Also use a comma before 'so' to join clauses, and 'so that' is unnecessary. This involves incorrect use of pronouns/nouns and singular/plural (12 and 1). Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and the coordinating conjunction 'so' with a comma: '...couldn't afford motorcycles, so they only use bicycles.'