Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two brief supporting details with logical linking. Correct tense use (past) is essential. Avoid redundancy and unclear words like "tired" here. For example, say you did or did not have a bike, explain why briefly (e.g. parental concerns, cost), and finish with one concise comment.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My mother thought it was unsafe for me to ride on busy roads, so she preferred I walk or use public transport. As a result, I only learned to cycle much later.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar and cohesive linking. Begin with a clear opinion, then add specific supporting details such as who uses bikes (students, commuters), reasons (cheap, healthy, traffic), and an example. Avoid confusing phrases like "my bikes" and inconsistent age terms.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers and commuters. Many people cycle to save money and avoid traffic, and cities have started adding bike lanes to encourage this. However, young children tend to use scooters or are driven by parents for safety reasons.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was tired because my mother, never. Mother is very, very caring and yeah.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother didn't buy me one. My mother is very caring.

Problems: wrong tense and auxiliary use. The original mixes present simple 'don't have' with past time 'when I was', so use past simple 'didn't have'. 'When I was tired' is likely intended as 'when I was a child' given context; adjust to match the question. 'Because my mother, never' is ungrammatical; use 'my mother didn't buy me one' or 'my mother never did'. Keep 'Mother is very, very caring' but remove repetition and informal 'yeah'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time frame (use past simple for past events), use proper auxiliary 'did' for negatives in past, and complete clauses (include object 'one').

× For young children's, no, and for younger and adult children, yes.

✓ For young children, no; for older children and adults, yes.

Problems: incorrect plural possessive 'children's' used instead of plural noun 'children'. 'Younger and adult children' is ambiguous; likely meant 'older children and adults'. Use parallel structure and correct noun forms. Suggestion: use plural noun 'children' without apostrophe for subject, and keep parallel categories ('older children and adults').

× My bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

Problems: 'My bikes' implies the student's own bikes, which contradicts context; subject-verb agreement is okay but pronoun/reference is wrong. The intended meaning is general popularity of bikes, so use the plural noun 'Bikes' without 'my'. Suggestion: use general noun to express common popularity rather than possessive 'my'.